Nations should suspend government funding for the arts when significant numbers of their citizens are hungry or unemployed.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
The greatness of a nation is measured by the general welfare of its inhabitants. The public should be happy and satisfied in order to move the country towards growth. While promoting arts may bring fame to the nation, in my opinion, issues such as unemployment and poverty are crucial and should be addressed first.
If the government keeps funding the artists while there are significant number of citizens starving or unemployed, it will not be just unfair but also inhumane. Funding arts will only benefit a certain group of people. The major function of the government should be to think of the happiness and satisfaction of their citizens. If the rulers completely ignore the suffering people and keep providing money to artists, the rich will get richer and the poor will get poorer, it will not contribute anything towards the growth of the nation.
Moreover, the problems such as poverty and unemployment can lead to more severe issues such as corruption and other criminal activities. Humans need to earn to have two meals for themselves and their family. Due to their helplessness, they can be lured to carry out criminal acts in return of high money. Furthermore, these destitute will only hate the government and may participate in riots and other acts that ruins nation's peace and spread fear.
If the government cares more about the contentment of all their citizens, the country can develop as a whole. If majority of the country's population is happy, healthy and satisfied, and the rate of unemployment is decreased, the per capita income will increase which in turn will result in the rise of country's GDP. This will be helpful in country's economic growth. The nation will benefit from this and will have enough money to fund the arts while also taking care of the economic condition of other citizens.
Art is important and preserving art and artists is necessary, however, priority should be given to the satisfaction and happiness of the whole country rather then just a group of certain profession.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 159, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'than'? 'than' is used for comparisons, 'then' is an expression of time.
Suggestion: than
...d happiness of the whole country rather then just a group of certain profession.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, then, while, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.3162921348 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1693.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 339.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.99410029499 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68890665885 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 215.323595506 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525073746313 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 704.065955056 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.99550561798 160% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0162473602 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.8125 118.986275619 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1875 23.4991977007 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.21951772744 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147472994478 0.243740707755 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0522579893562 0.0831039109588 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310702720367 0.0758088955206 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.082751237736 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0199788029475 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 14.1392134831 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.1639044944 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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