As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Technology has forever shaped mankind's journey on earth. What started with the printing press, radio, and television has made a halt on the Internet. Critics argue that the technology boom was inevitable. Today a whole new generation is born which has never seen a world without the Internet or smartphones.
In many aspects, technology has shaped our lives for the better. Certain tasks like stock market analysis and prediction, weather forecasting, health prediction (like if a tumor is malignant or benign), and street directions are complex tasks. In a world without our modern-day technology, performing such tasks would be an ordeal and in many cases, the accuracy of performing such tasks would take a hit. Having computers efficiently and reliably performing such tasks is a boon.
However technology boon has its consequences. Let us take the case of social media - an online platform where humans socialize. Our society has shown us that many humans have a habit of posting news without verifying the facts. This has severe consequences in our society. The human mind is shaped by miscreants who use such a medium to spread communal tension and hatred. An extreme example is that of the Rohingya crisis wherein many people were led to believe in extremist ideas using social media platforms like Facebook, which ended in the country (Myanmar) seeing a genocide orchestrated by the military regime. Recently, mob lynching cases have also been observed in India, wherein villagers were led to believe in fake news using a chat application called Whatsapp. We can safely conclude from such events that it is easy to plant seeds of communal tension, hatred, and fear using technology.
Finally, for every Rohingya crisis and mob lynching cases there are cases wherein technology has saved millions of lives like that of the recent Odissa floods. Millions were air rescued by obtaining their geolocations using sophisticated technology. Technology has many boons and curses, however in the long term, I truly believe it will shape mankind's journey for better. We should embrace its positive sides and fiercely fight against the negatives. We should remember that technology started with the thought of connecting people not dividing them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, so, as for, in many cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 33.0505617978 70% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1889.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 360.0 442.535393258 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24722222222 5.05705443957 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35587717469 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68866497739 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.586111111111 0.4932671777 119% => OK
syllable_count: 585.0 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 23.0359550562 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.7447886627 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.9523809524 118.986275619 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 23.4991977007 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.52380952381 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105553523321 0.243740707755 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324086562949 0.0831039109588 39% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0301841713956 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.065369576561 0.150359130593 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030766780962 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 48.8420337079 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.87 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 100.480337079 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 11.2143820225 78% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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