As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
The technology boom of the 21st century has seen a plethora of human activities automated by machines, mobile applications and several others devices. From simple tasks such as a calendar to highly complex tasks like communicating with people in a different location as yours, technology is becoming part of our culture and the way we lead our lives. Because of this ever increasing presence of technology in our lives, it is possible for one to think that we are becoming over-reliant and its use might reduce our ability to think for ourselves, but I disagree with this stance. In the following paragraphs, I will discuss three reasons for my position.
Firstly, as technology takes of our daily lives, we are delegating easily automated tasks to technology thereby giving us free time to make more important decisions. A task such as remembering the birthday of a loved one or date of an important meeting might seem easy at first glance, but sometimes can be a burden. The use of calenders, reminders, organizers have taken over several of these tasks and has made it easy for people to use to manage their time more efficiently. While it is true that technology makes some decisions on our behalf, it frees up more time for us to do more important work.
Secondly, use of technology creates problems of its own that requires humans to think for themselves. An example case where the increasing use of communication technology requires development of a robust infrastructure to support it. With the increasing use of mobile phones and similar devices, telecommmunication companies and have an ever increasing problem of supporting its use. problems such as selecting optimal route for laying cables and positioning of towers, arise and require human beings to create solutions relying on their skills and experience. this example shows that through the pervasive use of technology arises other problems that require humans to solve and in the course of looking for solutions they exercise independent thought through which we try to solve this problem.
Thirdly, the use of the internet presents a unique case. it may seem that the use of the internet promotes unoriginality and banality. through its use, we humans are subject to the views of others. Social media influencers, celebrities, have an ever increasing presence in the lives of many. many brands use them to advertise their products and it might seem that this restricts the choices of people and their decisions are being made for them. but this in itself presents a need for humans to rely on their thinking faculty. All of the time, there are different companies competing for customers. Potential customers have to make decisions and must be discerning, considering many factors such as cost, quality, delivery time and others, to come to a decision. this example showss that even in cases that seem like humans have decisions been made for them, they still have to exercise independent thought and come to a conclusion . it is true technology is fast taking over daily lives and we rely heavily on it to solve some of our problems. but the reliance on technology has not taken away our ability to think for ourselves. it has, in fact, made us more in control of our decisions giving us new ways and opportunities to think for ourselves, solve more of our problems and push for growth and development.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, third, thirdly, while, in fact, such as, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 33.0505617978 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 82.0 58.6224719101 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2824.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 566.0 442.535393258 128% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98939929329 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87757670434 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83436936087 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 261.0 215.323595506 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.461130742049 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 912.6 704.065955056 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2229270354 60.3974514979 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.96 118.986275619 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.64 23.4991977007 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.64 5.21951772744 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311329636182 0.243740707755 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0912000381064 0.0831039109588 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745503574853 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.194988594884 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0298617778085 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.1392134831 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 100.480337079 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 11.8971910112 168% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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