As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems , the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely detoriate.
The issue presents a view that I would agree partially, but I would not fully support that it detoriates the ability of humans to think by themselves.
In today's progressive and fast paced world, technology plays a vital role in day to day life. As said, 'Necessity is the mother of Invention', every technical product that we use was created to ease out the work. Using technology to sort problem saves time, increases efficiency and reduces error. To expand this point, consider an example of an accountant. An accountant deals with hundreds and thousands of data in a day. Doing the job manually will not only take up most of his time but also create more confusions, errors which can lead to frustration at the end of the day. Using a software or an app , it not only helps to avoid confusions but also help in meeting deadlines.
However, I do not support introducing technological stuffs to young school going children. It is very necessary that at tender age children are taught things that require more mental thinking power than exposing them to even gadget like calculator. It is important that basic knowledge in terms of math, english or other subjects should be taught in the conventional way.
Thus in the original statement there are some good perspectives and adopting it would be good choice, but refraining it will make the individual lag behind. In the conclusion, one has to make a concrete decision on the use of technology in the right way
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.5258426966 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 58.6224719101 61% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1215.0 2235.4752809 54% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 253.0 442.535393258 57% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.8023715415 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7330917364 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 215.323595506 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.664031620553 0.4932671777 135% => OK
syllable_count: 379.8 704.065955056 54% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.2307692308 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.4615384615 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4615384615 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.152706055764 0.243740707755 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0421594220646 0.0831039109588 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436826635124 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0849876530801 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338189146767 0.0667264976115 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.1392134831 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 12.1639044944 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.38706741573 105% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 100.480337079 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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