As people rely more and mroe on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surley deteriorate.
During the times technology wasn't available for everyone and wasn't extended worldwide, there were less educated and sophisticated people.As the technology has improved and has expanded, we are experiencing a more sophisticated society. In my opinion technology is a tool that helps us to accelerate our thoughts and our theories. It's a tool that helps us turn our imagination into reality. Therefore technology not only develop our thoughts, but also helps us to think in new dimensions that we couldn't even imagine before. Furthermore we shouldn't forget the fact that technology is a human's achievement and is designed based on human thoughts. For example all the applications that we use daily on our devices like cell phones, tablets, computers and etc, are coded by programmers. All the programs are human thoughts which have been translated to computer language.
Another example that we can mention in this regard is calculator. It's used worldwide and most of individuals possess one. Although calculators help us to solve the equations, but it's our mathematical logic that is fundamental to reach a solution.
Nowadays all of the hospitals and medical centers are equipped with cutting-edge medical devices with the highest technology which have made so many incurable diseases curable. However if there isn't any doctors or physicians, how can these devices cure patients alone?
In conclusion, we as humans use our logic and our ability of thinking to shape resolutions that sometimes these resolutions turn into technology.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 12, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'times'' or 'time's'?
Suggestion: times'; time's
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
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Suggestion: wasn't
...nology wasnt available for everyone and wasnt extended worldwide, there were less edu...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
... less educated and sophisticated people.As the technology has improved and has exp...
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Line 1, column 331, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: It's; It is
...celerate our thoughts and our theories. Its a tool that helps us turn our imaginati...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...s us turn our imagination into reality. Therefore technology not only develop our thought...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...s us to think in new dimensions that we couldnt even imagine before. Furthermore we sho...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Furthermore,
...ns that we couldnt even imagine before. Furthermore we shouldnt forget the fact that techno...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: shouldn't
...dnt even imagine before. Furthermore we shouldnt forget the fact that technology is a hu...
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Line 1, column 586, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'humans'' or 'human's'?
Suggestion: humans'; human's
...nt forget the fact that technology is a humans achievement and is designed based on hu...
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Line 2, column 90, Rule ID: MOST_SOME_OF_NNS[1]
Message: After 'most of', you should use 'the' ('most of the individuals') or simply say ''most individuals''.
Suggestion: most of the individuals; most individuals
...d is calculator. Its used worldwide and most of individuals possess one. Although calculators help ...
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Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...ors help us to solve the equations, but its our mathematical logic that is fundamen...
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Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...amental to reach a solution. Nowadays all of the hospitals and medical centers are equip...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...ade so many incurable diseases curable. However if there isnt any doctors or physicians...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: isn't
...able diseases curable. However if there isnt any doctors or physicians, how can thes...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 58.6224719101 39% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 12.9106741573 31% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1294.0 2235.4752809 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 242.0 442.535393258 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34710743802 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.94415379849 4.55969084622 87% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00609539456 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 148.0 215.323595506 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.611570247934 0.4932671777 124% => OK
syllable_count: 419.4 704.065955056 60% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.9542716222 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5384615385 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6153846154 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15384615385 5.21951772744 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 7.80617977528 192% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132967837379 0.243740707755 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.043524071116 0.0831039109588 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402441594204 0.0758088955206 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.067952126485 0.150359130593 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0472382320045 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 14.1392134831 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.38706741573 112% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 33.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 2.0 Out of 6
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