The primary goal of technological advancement should be to increase people's
efficiency so that they have more leisure time.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree
with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In
developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the
statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations
shape your position.
If you type the words "technological device" into google, you will immediately hit about related millions pages. Some of these devices are not vital and essential: smart hair brush, smart water bottle, Bluetooth toast, and even more gadgets. But definitely too many advanced technological devices has been made that have effective policies. However, it is a fact that technological advancement changes the laws of the world especially economic, production and capitalism. I believe that the primary goal of technological advancement should be increase productions' efficiency instead of people's efficiency.
The use of advanced industrial machinery and equipment increases the speed and efficiency of productions. This saves time in production. In addition, saving time reduces product costs and consumers get products without wasting their time, with low price and up quality. The economy is growing rapidly where in society that invents modern equipment and is advanced in the industrial field.
This subject can be investigating from another point of view. Over recent year, more and more people have been attending to use personal advanced technological devices, like that iPod, cellphone, laptop, Internet. At the first time when you use these devices, you are very satisfied to do all things very fast and you have a plenty of time to arrange rest of your duties. But I believe that these kinds of technological advanced have negative effective in personal life. First, technological advanced can make people less productive. People end up multitasking. It is a serious and growing problem in most societies. They always have to do all things at the same time. They have emails that need to be answered, people who want to chat, website and news which you have to watch. Second, technological advanced can make people less creative. They can't focus on one thing whiteout interruptions.
In conclusion technological advancement increase productions' efficiency that offer more quality products to market and indirectly saving people shopping time. Also I believe technological advancement is one of the biggest irritations in modern personal life. Technological advancement makes people nervous, multitasking, and less productive and might waste their time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 357, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...been made that have effective policies. However it is a fact that technological advance...
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Line 1, column 558, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'increased'?
Suggestion: increased
... of technological advancement should be increase productions efficiency instead of peopl...
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Line 3, column 163, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'reduces'' or 'redux's'?
Suggestion: reduces'; redux's
...in production. In addition, saving time reduces product costs and consumers get product...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ced can make people less creative. They cant focus on one thing whiteout interruptio...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...us on one thing whiteout interruptions. In conclusion technological advancement ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
...indirectly saving people shopping time. Also I believe technological advancement is ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 14.8657303371 128% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 33.0505617978 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 58.6224719101 67% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1936.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 349.0 442.535393258 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.54727793696 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09782804821 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.561604584527 0.4932671777 114% => OK
syllable_count: 616.5 704.065955056 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59117977528 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.3895287055 60.3974514979 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.1739130435 118.986275619 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1739130435 23.4991977007 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317159369092 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0877738874205 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617655660443 0.0758088955206 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179728396514 0.150359130593 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0769552161715 0.0667264976115 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 14.1392134831 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 39.33 48.8420337079 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.32 12.1639044944 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 100.480337079 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.