The purpose of an education is to prepare students for financially rewarding careers.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Education plays a vital role in development of any individual. Not only getting education is important, but it is crucial to get the correct and valued education. The author states that the purpose of education is to prepare students for financially rewarding careers. I disagree with the author's opinion and I believe that there are serious flaws in his opinion.
The amount of money should not define a person, nor should decide if the person is successful or not. There is no relation between the happiness of a person and amount of money he earns. What education must teach students is to find a way to do things that make them happy. Variety of things can bring people happiness. Many people prefer to do charity and donate their earnings. This act of philanthropy brings happiness to these people. For example, many people such as music virtuoso Akon has donated most of his salary to the impoverished citizens of Africa and has helped in the development of poor African nations. This example clearly contradicts author's point that the purpose of education is to have a financially rewarding career. Hence, to re-affirm I believe that the purpose of education should be to become a successful and happy human being.
Furthermore, students might themselves prefer a career path in a field in which they are proficient but which might not be so financially rewarding. According to author's position such a career path might be considered of low value. This might have an effect on student's thinking and might hinder their so-called abilities or talent. If a student wants to prefer an unorthodox, low-earning career path, he must be encouraged to do so. Many such careers such as teaching and dancing do not earn a lot of money, but are regarded with huge respect. Hence, the purpose of education should be to make students follow their passion and help them become professional in whatever field they wish to.
However, in a world of cut-throat competition, it is essential to earn money. It is obvious that without money one cannot survive. Hence, the education system should teach students ways in which they can earn money. However, such ways should revolve around student's career choice and should teach him or her ways to earn money in their career field. Hence, although education should teach students financial independence, it should not become the primary purpose of education.
Right education is a gift to a student's talent. Hence it is important for a student to get a valued education. To conclude, I believe the author's opinion is incorrect and I disagree with him. The primary purpose of education should to be hone the skills and talents of kids and help them towards the career path of their choice.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... rewarding careers. I disagree with the authors opinion and I believe that there are se...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ome a successful and happy human being. Furthermore, students might themselves p...
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'author'.
Suggestion: author
... so financially rewarding. According to authors position such a career path might be co...
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Suggestion:
...an earn money. However, such ways should revolve around students career choice an...
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'students'' or 'student's'?
Suggestion: students'; student's
...tion. Right education is a gift to a students talent. Hence it is important for a stu...
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Suggestion: authors'; author's
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, hence, however, if, so, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.5258426966 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.3162921348 80% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 12.9106741573 155% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2274.0 2235.4752809 102% => OK
No of words: 460.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94347826087 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68172771102 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.445652173913 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 703.8 704.065955056 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.2370786517 138% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.1526117111 60.3974514979 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 81.2142857143 118.986275619 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4285714286 23.4991977007 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.21428571429 5.21951772744 42% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 20.0 10.2758426966 195% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200369600258 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0596558856378 0.0831039109588 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0566838876035 0.0758088955206 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128601561899 0.150359130593 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368097832572 0.0667264976115 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 14.1392134831 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.