Society should identify those children who have special talents and provide training for them at an early age to develop their talents.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Talent is a person's natural ability, skill to do a particular work or task. Generally, a person talented in some job has high probability of getting success in that work. It is something that doesn't get acquired in a day or two, usually children at a very young age have inclination towards the things they have knack for. The prompt suggests that society should identify these talents in children and help them develop at early age. I mostly agree with this suggestion for the following two reasons.
Reason one being, as a child you don't have that sense to choose what you like or you cannot understand that you have special skills for some work be it art, technology or any other skills. It is the duty of people around you to take the responsibility to help you nurture your abilities. This works both ways, as stated above that chances of excelling increases in that work so there is probability of you finding a solution or give a direction to some solution of some problems which none of your peers would have thought of. Long pending problems of humanity can be solved. This will in turn make life of society better and effective. For example, Oscar winning music composer A.R. Rahman had interest in creating music from very young age. He used to create music from common objects around him. It was matter of time, his music teacher found out about this and encouraged him to work in this direction. Today, mental health patients are healing by listening to his music. All this was possible because someone noticed his skill and gave him resources and confidence to work on it. Had no one noticed this, he would have worked somewhere he had little to no interest in and also success would be dicey.
Secondly, as talent recognition will help our community in the same way it will help individuals. Since success is high with the task you have more inclination for, you can give better life to yourself and your family. A talented person because they have great aptitude for work may perform job quite easily and quickly, they get promoted and earn more in their fields. M.S Dhoni one of the greatest Indian cricketer, who is the most successful captain till date was interested in batting but his coaches identified that he has better skills in wicket-keeping and hence shaped him in that path. Result being, he knocked out a player in 0.01 second which is a world record. As indicated by this example, he obviously succeeded and provided better life for his family. Child of an office clerk now has respect and better standard of living. There are many such beautiful examples of people who have achieved great heights because of their talents. All thanks to their parents, teachers and mentors who could help them grow this small seed into a big tree which has given shadows, greenery and fruits to everyone who come near them.
Some might also argue that while there are many examples of people who have succeeded, there is a small proportion who haven't because of increased competition in the market even though they had talents. Which to some extend is true, in this case even though society notices and helps children to refine their skills it all depends on individual about how they make use of their talents. It is all about how you respect and give your mind and soul to something special you have. One cannot succeed just because of talent, hard work and will to build it makes it possible.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a person' or simply 'persons'?
Suggestion: a person; persons
Talent is a persons natural ability, skill to do a particul...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cess in that work. It is something that doesnt get acquired in a day or two, usually c...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ns. Reason one being, as a child you dont have that sense to choose what you like...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: S
...omoted and earn more in their fields. M.S Dhoni one of the greatest Indian cricke...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: haven't
...ceeded, there is a small proportion who havent because of increased competition in the...
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Line 7, column 218, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
... though they had talents. Which to some extend is true, in this case even though socie...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, while, for example, in the same way
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.4196629213 121% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 14.8657303371 161% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 33.0505617978 233% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 12.9106741573 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2820.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 600.0 442.535393258 136% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7 5.05705443957 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.94923200384 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36592476634 2.79657885939 85% => OK
Unique words: 305.0 215.323595506 142% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.508333333333 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 875.7 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9818227848 60.3974514979 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2413793103 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6896551724 23.4991977007 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.89655172414 5.21951772744 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 24.0 10.2758426966 234% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299480202689 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747320677155 0.0831039109588 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0704732663744 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.195074216407 0.150359130593 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0453632117605 0.0667264976115 68% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.98 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.38706741573 90% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 100.480337079 109% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.