Some people believe that the most effective means of advancing the development of a society is by focusing on the contributions resulting from the goals of each individual. Others believe that goals pertaining to the whole society provide a necessary unifying direction, without which individual contributions are meaningless.
The author has provided two ways to look into the development of a society : First, by focusing on the contributions resulting from the goals of each individual, and second, that goals pertaining to the whole society provide a necessary unifying direction and without this, individual contributions are meaningless. However, I believe that the any contribution for the society made by any individual or a group, would be equally important and we cannot say that the contributions by individuals are meaningless in compare to unifying directional approach.
We have tons of examples of people who has made remarkable contributions by their own for the society. Many scientific discoveries have been made by many scientists while the public had no faith or no approval for their theories. For examples, White Brothers has been ridicule by their contraries for having and imagine a whole where we can fly in the sky, however, as we all know, flying in a airplane is so usual in today's world thanks to White Brothers and their inventions. In this case we see that the overall society wasn't unified in a single direction but the contribution of White Brothers has been marked as one of the most revolutionary discoveries.
Another supporting example we have right now is Bill Gates. As we know Bill Gates has been contempted for inventing machine like computer and beliving that these computers will be our future. When this happened many people believed that the computers are curse to humans. Though We know that how swifty we have adapted these computers in our lives just because of the benefits it provides to us. Because of computers our medical science has been at its highest peak it was never been. Computers made our lives easy and better in the sense of overall perspective. Therefore, we should not neglect or say that individual contributions are meaningless.
However, I also believe that unified efforts to surve society and people's well being requires one direction and more support from all individuals. For example, one individual cannot save enviornmental global warming we are facing right now. Our coloboration for taking effective steps to save humanity makes huge difference in compare to single individual. Although, even single individual can make difference too and thus we all should provide our individual contribution to save this earth.
All in all, it was wrong to say that individual contribution is meaningless just because it was done by one person. Rather it would be appropriate to say that any contributions made for society is important wherethere it is individual or unified by society. Any development for the well-being of society should be consider as remarkable regardless any further classification.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.5258426966 128% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 445.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1797752809 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01089019927 2.79657885939 108% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 215.323595506 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480898876404 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 704.065955056 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8990262246 60.3974514979 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255684949265 0.243740707755 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802166525306 0.0831039109588 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10841099002 0.0758088955206 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166977469685 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147494257313 0.0667264976115 221% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 100.480337079 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 11.8971910112 177% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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