Some school leavers tend to go travelling or work for a period of time before going to university directly what do you think are the advantages and disadvantages

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Some school leavers tend to go travelling or work for a period of time before going to university directly. what do you think are the advantages and disadvantages

Nowadays, a bunch of students after leaving schools have a tendency to travel or work for a period of time before directly enrolling in universities. This essay is to outline the possible drawbacks as well as potential benefits of this problem.

On the one hand, it is obvious that relaxing or finding a job after leaving high schools brings students a considerate number of advantages. It could be explained that students find it easier to get hands-on experience through travelling or working. Moreover, they are likely to be better at social and interpersonal skills. To illustrate, people interact with others more frequently, especially their colleges, directors,… will succeed in communication skills. Besides, they do not only easily enrich their knowledge and broaden their horizons but they can also have an opportunity to see the world.

On the other hand, the drawbacks of a gap period between high schools and universities are inevitable. That is because it is the likelihood for students to forget certain academic knowledge. So that it takes time to keep up with their peers. Additionally, they possibly lose motivation to continue getting into universities. The reason can be cited is that after a period of time of working, they become attached to their jobs. For instance, promotion opportunities enable them to stay in their job and keep delaying their educational path.

In conclusion, despite the fact that working or relaxing for a period of time before attending universities provide students with real experiences in their mature stages, it may cause detrimental outcomes to pursuit higher education.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 93, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
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Message: “So that” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s to forget certain academic knowledge. So that it takes time to keep up with their pee...
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Suggestion: period
...The reason can be cited is that after a period of time of working, they become attached to the...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, may, moreover, so, well, for instance, in conclusion, as well as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.5258426966 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 58.6224719101 72% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1376.0 2235.4752809 62% => OK
No of words: 259.0 442.535393258 59% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31274131274 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0023271287 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.594594594595 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 704.065955056 61% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5767614109 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.2857142857 118.986275619 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35714285714 5.21951772744 141% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162853510055 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0556276627997 0.0831039109588 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0711813699435 0.0758088955206 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118779205578 0.150359130593 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0570402742358 0.0667264976115 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.8420337079 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 12.1639044944 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.1 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 100.480337079 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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