Technologies Deteriorate the Ability to Think
We as humans have evolved a lot since the ancient ages. From the ancient Greeks who made pyramids to ancient roman who made fantastic structures. we stand today with having technology in our hands which helps us to explore the world with one click of a finger.
During the ancient times humans had worked very hard to do normal everyday things and if we look into this issue closely they indeed had to work hard for their survival. there were many problems faced by a man from the stone ages. to find food, to find shelter he had to go through a lot of trouble.
Moving forward to 16th century. the time of industrial revolution, where inventions of multiple machines started taking place. this time period was a game changer for the people of the world as the inventions build during this time gave more time and less labour work to humans. as humans now had more time to think they started thinking.
And then after 2 centuries we faced a technological revolution. after sir Tim Berners-lee invented the world-wide web, and after it became available to the people of world. the people had the knowledge of the world on their finger tips. this was another of a revolutionising invention.
and mind you, these were not discoveries, these were inventions where people had to spend dozens of years of their life to bring this life changing thing called technology to our hands.
Now if we look at today's world. In India, You can now get a gigabyte of data for as cheap as 21 Rupees only. if you look back, this wasn't even in the mind of the people who were celebrating discovery of wheel. This is a very long journey.
Surely it was an amazing roller coaster ride of events. which in the end led to creation of this tech which we carry in our hand always. yet it is in today's world called addictive. and moreover it is affecting the youth of our nation.
If we go in-depth of this problem. as soon as a new-born goes home for the first time, he is introduced to a smart phone or a tablet, which is used to entertain the new-born.
which further becomes an addiction for him. up to such a level, that kids have murdered their parents, for stopping them from using their smartphones. but parents never had any bad intentions for their kids. But as from the beginning of the kids time they are introduced to such a revolutionary thing known as smart phone that their addiction has no end. and they don't even realise what they are doing.
So to close this up to a time in the past technology was an amazing discovery but as time passed technology took over people in a negative way and yes according to me it deteriorates humans ability to think, which can be clearly seen in the example of kid murdering his parents for the technology.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, so, then, mind you
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 33.0505617978 157% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 58.6224719101 125% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 12.9106741573 46% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2259.0 2235.4752809 101% => OK
No of words: 497.0 442.535393258 112% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54527162978 5.05705443957 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47400322526 2.79657885939 88% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 696.6 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.10617977528 161% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.2370786517 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.6557782688 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.8709677419 118.986275619 61% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0322580645 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.61290322581 5.21951772744 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 10.0 4.97078651685 201% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 27.0 7.80617977528 346% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 17.0 4.83258426966 352% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0973509788789 0.243740707755 40% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0192579883127 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0558700091135 0.0758088955206 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0444388311546 0.150359130593 30% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.082899429469 0.0667264976115 124% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 14.1392134831 57% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 48.8420337079 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 12.1743820225 59% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 8.81 12.1639044944 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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