Although innovations such as video, computers, and the Internet seem to offer schools improved methods for instructing students, these technologies all too often distract from real learning.
The statement asserts that video, computer, internet and such technologies are too often distract from real learning although these technologies are offered schools improvement methods for instructing students. I disagree with this statement inasmuch as video, computers, internet and such technologies are today necessary elements in our everyday life and these technologies make our life more easier, faster and more comfortable. These technologies made changes our world and save huge time. These technologies are the necessary elements for learning. However, there are also some problems that is made by these technologies such as these technologies had increased our social distance and decreased face to face discussion that obviously deviate from real learning from society.
One compelling argument in favor of my position is technologies like video, computers, internet have make our life easier and save times that can be used to learn more and do more works. These technologies foster for real learning and make easy to learn. For example, live video classes save our time and energy. Because before these technologies invented, we had to go to class and this took huge time and could loss energy. Today we can attend in class from home in a comfortable environment that save time and energy and this can foster to learn.
Another argument is there are huge video platforms in today like youtube, tiktok. There are more recorded free video in different topics. Anyone can learn easily by watching these videos. For example, anyone can learn website design without any cost from youtube. This is made today very easy to learn and improve skills.
Moreover, internet, computer is making super easy to search for anything and get correct answer. These technologies not only emphasize our learning but also keep society away from disparate to learn. Because these technologies made free to gain maximum knowledge.
However, there are some problems that are created because of these technologies. Social distance is one of them. Technologies improvement increase our social distance. We can get everything in Internet and this descrease face to face communication. And for this we are now deviated from social learning that affect badly on our mental health and decrease our learning ability. Another problem is, these technologies deviate our from the social responsibilities like parent's responsibilities to their children and vive versa. This can decrease moral ethics and this can make distract from real learning.
In conclusion, although without computers, video, internet and these technologies make our life comfortable, foster learning and get more opportunities for learning, there are some drawback of these technologics that also can distract from real learning. Today's life is impossible without these technologies. So we should more aware of this technological drawback and try to avoid this. This awareness can exhort the real learning
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 391, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...fe and these technologies make our life more easier, faster and more comfortable. These tec...
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Line 4, column 201, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...p society away from disparate to learn. Because these technologies made free to gain ma...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 33.0505617978 169% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2502.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 460.0 442.535393258 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.43913043478 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.55969084622 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84140996444 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.428260869565 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 800.1 704.065955056 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.2370786517 143% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 23.0359550562 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.6052116288 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.275862069 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8620689655 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.51724137931 5.21951772744 48% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367018508053 0.243740707755 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.11459482622 0.0831039109588 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.121563137135 0.0758088955206 160% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2190381 0.150359130593 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0975425069896 0.0667264976115 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 14.1392134831 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.8420337079 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.98 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.8971910112 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.2143820225 71% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.7820224719 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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