A true university education encompasses far more than the narrow, specialized study of a single discipline. Only through exploring the broad spectrum of liberal arts courses can students become truly learned.
The issue as raised seems to be quite convincing at first glance but when studied thoroughly various flaws do certainly appear . A university as claimed encampassed far more than a narrow study of a single discipline is quite true to a greater extent as ideally a university is meant to prepare the individual for the multi faceted outer world but at the same time the reasoning provided to justify the situation by imbibing the teaching through various liberal art courses apart from specilized discipline to the students in order to truly prepare them for the outer world is quite constricted in its scope . So, reframing the justification with proper and complete aspects of the various skills that are required in the outer world can surely strengthen it .
A true university is always concerned with the overall development of the students rather than proficiency in a single discipline alone which is quite aptly reflected in the author's first statement as in order to effectively contribute in the outer world one has to deal with various aspects apart from the specialization that certainly will be the major contributor in the economy like inter personal communication , awareness , presence of mind and other aspects as well. The individual's success often depends on these other factors despite of having a profiecincy in a narrow area as the market has grown quite competitve and with the increasing supply of employees in the job market the employers often look for the other skills apart from the proficiency in the subject knowledge . So this statement made is quite apt as per my knowledge .
In the reasoning that has been provided to justify the above discrepancy in the education structure in terms of its relevence the author certainly has left lot of grounds for onte to cast doubt on which can lead to untoward situation in pitching the issue . By exploring the various liberal art courses , the author assumes that such courses are more than enough to build the individual but what he ignores is that at the same time the university is supposed to provide a healthy and lively environment to the students so than they can equip themselves enough so as to burgeon in their career path.Moreover,their is another aspect to education that is often learned outside the classes as these skills though necessary for the individual cannot be taught by a teaching faculty given the subtle nature of these skills . A proper inclusion of various other skills will certainly concrete the foundation of the claim and make the claim fail proof when questioned .
In closing this essay , I would suggest that the author should reconsider the justification provided and reframe it with a holistic outlook in order to gather all the left out aspects that are required to strengthen the claim which certainly will broaden its scope and make it presentable enough to the concerned authority .
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, moreover, so, then, well, apart from, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 14.8657303371 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 58.6224719101 119% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2418.0 2235.4752809 108% => OK
No of words: 480.0 442.535393258 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0375 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81852392579 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 215.323595506 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460416666667 0.4932671777 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 761.4 704.065955056 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 20.2370786517 49% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 48.0 23.0359550562 208% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 163.624692513 60.3974514979 271% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 241.8 118.986275619 203% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 48.0 23.4991977007 204% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.5 5.21951772744 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 7.80617977528 269% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178904975025 0.243740707755 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0590579995189 0.0831039109588 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0745588654137 0.0758088955206 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100064980779 0.150359130593 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0729522574963 0.0667264976115 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 26.3 14.1392134831 186% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 22.76 48.8420337079 47% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 22.0 12.1743820225 181% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.84 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.34 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 100.480337079 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 11.8971910112 235% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 21.2 11.2143820225 189% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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