Unfortunately, in contemporary society, creating an appealing image has become more important than the reality or truth behind that image.
Popularity and public image have become an important part of the contemporary society. Advertisments of companies claim their products and servies to be the very best, numerous articles on magazines and the internet are extentsively utillised to create a flourishing and appealing image before the common masses. But, according to me, this is just the tip of the iceberg, gleaming bright in the rays of the sun, and the truth or reality that lies beneath this image might often come as shocking or even unbelievable.
In our daily lives, we are surrounded by public figures. Newspapers, tabloids, the internet are filled to the brim with updates about politicians, celebrities, authors, etc., all of them in a pursuit to establish a bright image of them. For instance, we have often witnessed politicians engaging in charitable work, donating to funds, visiting slums and the underprivileged as a part of campaigning for elections, only to be caught slacking, and not fulfilling any of the promises made to general public to gain more votes. Moreover, a lot of government officials, religious leaders and celebrities have been found to be engaging into illegal and unethical activities such as bribery, supply and consumption of illegal drugs, poaching of animals, sex and child trafficking. These examples clearly show how most of the emminent personas are only concerned with making an appealing image in the public.
Again, in this age of numerous social media platforms buzzing in through our daily lives, it appears extremely difficult to distinguish between reality and just a facade. Influencers on platforms such as Instagram and YouTube portray themselves to be living the best of their lives, travelling to various countries and indulging into multitudes of luxuries. This pretentious lifestyle does not portray any of the daily struggles that a person has to go through in his daily life. On one hand, one might be suffering from mental health issues, such as anxiety, lonilness and depression, which on the other hand we post photos of us partying and 'enjoying life' on our social media accounts, only to pretend to be something else, and make an appealing public image.
In conclusion, we can see how today's world revolves around how we are perceived by others, no matter what might lie beneath that bright facade. Popular public figures like politicians, actors, social media influencers are often found to be involved in numerous scandals, although they portray themselves to be righteous and of moral character in front of the general public. On the other hand, when we take a peek deep enough in the daily life of an ordinary person, seemingly 'living the best of their lives' on facebook, instagram, or twitter, we might find them struggling with many problems of daily life.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e internet are extentsively utillised to create a flourishing and appealing image...
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Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... fulfilling any of the promises made to general public to gain more votes. Moreover, a lot of ...
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Line 5, column 763, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se, and make an appealing public image. In conclusion, we can see how todays wor...
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Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... and of moral character in front of the general public. On the other hand, when we take a peek...
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Line 7, column 609, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gling with many problems of daily life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 456.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14035087719 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83774302439 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546052631579 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.2303723545 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.266666667 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147122146759 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563385945694 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814529825412 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105373160468 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108955853034 0.0667264976115 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 246, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e internet are extentsively utillised to create a flourishing and appealing image...
^^
Line 3, column 490, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... fulfilling any of the promises made to general public to gain more votes. Moreover, a lot of ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 763, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se, and make an appealing public image. In conclusion, we can see how todays wor...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 360, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
... and of moral character in front of the general public. On the other hand, when we take a peek...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 609, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...gling with many problems of daily life.
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, moreover, so, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.5258426966 82% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 12.9106741573 23% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2344.0 2235.4752809 105% => OK
No of words: 456.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14035087719 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62105577807 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83774302439 2.79657885939 101% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546052631579 0.4932671777 111% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.2303723545 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 156.266666667 118.986275619 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.4 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.21951772744 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147122146759 0.243740707755 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0563385945694 0.0831039109588 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0814529825412 0.0758088955206 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105373160468 0.150359130593 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108955853034 0.0667264976115 163% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.0 14.1392134831 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.03 48.8420337079 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.1639044944 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.59 8.38706741573 114% => OK
difficult_words: 129.0 100.480337079 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.