"We venerate loyalty - to our schools, employers, instituitions, friends as - a virtue.Loyalty, however, can be at least as detrimental an influence as it can be a beneficial one.”
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Loyalty gives life to many natural activities just like many other traits like friendship, hence lo
One major example that stands out is the believe that loyalty is a natural tendency that transcends humanity. It is a trait expressed in many animal species. This invaluable trait helps create a sense of belonging, its a part of the thread thats weaves a family together, bringing people of diverse backgrounds together to build communities which in turn could lead to the formation of nations. At the foundation of almost every nation is the feature of loyalty. For example, Kwame who fought for the independence of Ghana after his studies in the United Kingdom had a huge work opportunity that could had paid him huge sums of money, however, he resolved to come back to the then Gold Coast to liberate it from the shackles of colonialism. Who knows Ghana might have been the first sub-saharan country to gain independence had Kwame Nkrumah not had a sense of loyalty to his nation of birth.
Also, loyalty brings together individuals from differents facets of life to cohesively work on projects that are often of immense benefit to humanity. For example, the loyalty that once existed among the various Akan tribes in Ghana during the reign of their king Osei Tutu I, they put aside their difference, ended their long tribal disputes and wars to work together to fight the Colonial masters. This led to huge victory which is still study in the classrooms of many Ghanaian schools.
Though loyalty might have its shortcomings such as the loyalty many Nazi's had in Hithler to further his idea of cleansing the human race. A dent that will echo in history for a long time, this example though expouse some of the negativity of loyalty, further scrutiny will show that many Nazi commanders followed Hithler not mainly because they were loyal to his cause but because they were terrified. Yes loyalty will definitely have its shortcomings just as many other beneficial human traits, and this will mainlt be because some human beings often misappropriately use these positive traits to brandish evil act. Hence, loyalty in it self is not detrimental but when the motives behind it is wrong then that becomes the problem.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 38, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...o One major example that stands out is the believe that loyalty is a natural tendency that...
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Line 2, column 42, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...ne major example that stands out is the believe that loyalty is a natural tendency that...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 216, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...rait helps create a sense of belonging, its a part of the thread thats weaves a fam...
^^^
Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... of belonging, its a part of the thread thats weaves a family together, bringing peop...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 742, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...te it from the shackles of colonialism. Who knows Ghana might have been the first s...
^^^
Line 3, column 440, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'studied'.
Suggestion: studied
...This led to huge victory which is still study in the classrooms of many Ghanaian scho...
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a long time, this example though expouse some of the negativity of loyalty, furth...
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Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...long time, this example though expouse some of the negativity of loyalty, further scrutiny...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 637, Rule ID: IT_SELF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'itself'?
Suggestion: itself
...to brandish evil act. Hence, loyalty in it self is not detrimental but when the motives...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92021276596 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5597875789 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558510638298 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1272694156 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.307692308 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9230769231 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109899698427 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407031979703 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306329174964 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0611969142064 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020589497422 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 38, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...o One major example that stands out is the believe that loyalty is a natural tendency that...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 42, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'belief' (noun) instead of believe (verb)?
Suggestion: belief
...ne major example that stands out is the believe that loyalty is a natural tendency that...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 216, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...rait helps create a sense of belonging, its a part of the thread thats weaves a fam...
^^^
Line 2, column 241, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
... of belonging, its a part of the thread thats weaves a family together, bringing peop...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 742, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Who” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...te it from the shackles of colonialism. Who knows Ghana might have been the first s...
^^^
Line 3, column 440, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'studied'.
Suggestion: studied
...This led to huge victory which is still study in the classrooms of many Ghanaian scho...
^^^^^
Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...a long time, this example though expouse some of the negativity of loyalty, furth...
^^
Line 5, column 218, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...long time, this example though expouse some of the negativity of loyalty, further scrutiny...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 637, Rule ID: IT_SELF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'itself'?
Suggestion: itself
...to brandish evil act. Hence, loyalty in it self is not detrimental but when the motives...
^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, still, then, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 14.8657303371 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.3162921348 124% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 12.9106741573 39% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1850.0 2235.4752809 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92021276596 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5597875789 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 215.323595506 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558510638298 0.4932671777 113% => OK
syllable_count: 577.8 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.1272694156 60.3974514979 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.307692308 118.986275619 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9230769231 23.4991977007 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76923076923 5.21951772744 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109899698427 0.243740707755 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0407031979703 0.0831039109588 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0306329174964 0.0758088955206 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0611969142064 0.150359130593 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020589497422 0.0667264976115 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.1392134831 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.85 12.1639044944 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.