The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts show the partition of household expenditures, by major categories, in 1950 and 2010. In 1950 the main voice was housing, reaching 72% of total expenses, while the other five categories reached only 28% with only food expenses over 10%.

The situation changed dramatically in sixty years, with food expenses becoming the larger part of household expenditures with 34%. Housing expenses resisted at the second place, being the only other category over 20%. The remaining categories gathered almost 44%, with health care at 14% and "other" expenses at 19%, whereas education and transportation reached together almost 10%.

The main differences between 1950 and 2010 data consisted in the decrease of incidence about housing expenses, while other categories grew of size: food expenses went up of three times, health care almost increased of 500%, transportation almost doubled and "other" expenditures passed from 4.4% to 19.2%. Only education expenses incidence remained stable at 6%.

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Score: 7.5 out of 9
Category: Very Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 154 200
No. of Characters: 807 1000
No. of Different Words: 89 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.523 4.0
Average Word Length: 5.24 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.817 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 58 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 47 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 22 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.65 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.493 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.668 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.13 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 3 4

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I'm trying to reduce at minimum my mistakes; could I ask you what should I improve, to gain better scores?

I guess it's about the use of discourse markers (0.571 is still low if compared to 0.7). I see I particularly lack in Sentence-Sentence Coherence, if I read correctly the report.

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