the two maps below show an island before and after construction of some tourist facilities. summarise the information by selecting and reporting main features and make comparison where relevant.
The two maps below illustrate the comparison between before and after construction of some tourist facilities on a small island in size of approximately 300 meters.
According to second map, after construction the island has many facilities for tourist such as accommodation, restaurant and reception. Also many some roads for vehicles are created which connect pier to reception and restaurant, furthermore many footpaths between accommodations is established. Beside that, the beach is ready for swimming also many other sea sports like sailing is available. Moreover, a pier for boats and ships is constructed in south of island. On the other hand the quantities of trees have not changed also the area of beach has not extended.
To sum up, the face of island has changed after construction and many facilities have established there. But there is no changes in some aspects, for example in proportion of trees or the size of beach neither.
Also many some roads for vehicles are created
Also many roads for vehicles are created
many footpaths between accommodations is established.
many footpaths between accommodations are established.
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