The bar chart below show the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart below show the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar graph depicts the proportion of Australian male and female involving in doing exercise frequently in 2010 across six different age groups from 15 to over 65 years old. At the first glance, it is obvious that except for 15-24 age group, in comparison with men at the same age, the percentage of women engaging in physical activity was relatively higher.
As can be seen, Australian male were most keen on exercise activity at the age of 15-24, accounting for 52.8%. The figures gradually decreased as male entered middle-age, marking 42.2% and 39.5% respectively for 25-34 and 35-44 age groups. However, men were more interested in playing sports when getting older, with a slightly rise up to 46.7% at the age of 65 and over.
Regarding women’s ratios, it is clear that female who participate in physical activity most belonged to 45-54 age group, at 53.3% in total. Moreover, women at the young age from 15 to 24 were much less enthusiastic about doing exercise, compared with other age groups and men at the same age, reported at 47.7%. As Australian women reached the age of 65 and over, the rate dropped to 47.1%, which was nearly equal to that for male.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 317, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('rise') instead of another adjective.
...playing sports when getting older, with a slightly rise up to 46.7% at the age of 65 and over. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, thus, except for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 976.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 204.0 196.424390244 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78431372549 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.77926670891 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56169548093 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593137254902 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 293.4 283.868780488 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0924343683 43.030603864 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.0 112.824112599 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.5 22.9334400587 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.625 5.23603664747 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222739775503 0.215688989381 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.108258472102 0.103423049105 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0510877254045 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171489479171 0.15604864568 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621190644066 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 13.2329268293 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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