The bar chart below shows the number of students who choose certain university subjects in 2005

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The bar chart below shows the number of students who choose certain university subjects in 2005.

The given bar chart comparing the number of students in a thousand who choose to study various University subjects in 2005. The number for each subject is divided into male and female students.
Overall, we can see almost the female students choose Social Sciences and Languages while Sciences and Mathematics remained the most preferred subjects among boys.
Characteristically, around 24, 000 females chose social sciences, considerably higher than the males at about 14, 000. Also, the total (24, 000) was at the peak level as compared to other subjects. Next came Languages with approximately 18, 000 for girls vs 2, 000 for boys, making it (2, 000) the least total in the year. Sciences stood at just over 20, 000 (boys), which was relatively twice as much as the females at around 10, 000. As for Mathematics, females stood at 4, 000, which was nowhere near as close as males with 18, 000.

On the other hand, the most popular subjects for female students were less technical such as social sciences, languages and Literature. Social sciences were by far the most popular subject for women ( nearly 25. 000 students). However, very few female students chose to study mathematics and law ( 4. 000 students and 5. 000 students respectively). Nevertheless, just as many men as women chose to study humanities.
VÕ NGUYỄN BẢO NGỌC - B2102351

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Average: 9.1 (3 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ubjects among boys. Characteristically, around 24, 000 females chose social scie...
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...00 for boys, making it 2, 000 the least total in the year. Sciences stood at just ove...
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...y far the most popular subject for women nearly 25. 000 students. However, very f...
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...dents chose to study mathematics and law 4. 000 students and 5. 000 students resp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, nevertheless, so, while, as for, such as, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1087.0 965.302439024 113% => OK
No of words: 219.0 196.424390244 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96347031963 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.84690116678 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72886737023 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547945205479 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 310.5 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.4926829268 67% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.7199667083 43.030603864 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.6428571429 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6428571429 22.9334400587 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.23603664747 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.09268292683 244% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158878216428 0.215688989381 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0759449791541 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131120731859 0.0843802449381 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.165984112524 0.15604864568 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.173583577891 0.0819641961636 212% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.8 13.2329268293 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 61.2550243902 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 11.4140731707 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.9970731707 73% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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