The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009 The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants Summarise the information by selecting and r

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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart illustrates the number of people attending the course at an adult education centre in the year 2009. while the pie chart shows the percentage about the ages of these course. The numbers of women attending the course are tend to be much higher than the numbers of men(except in sculpture).With the lead in the amount of people, language is the course womens attend the most with 40 people , following is painting (30 people),drama(10 people) and sculpture(about 5 people).In the other hand mens seem to be less interested in these courses. The numbers of men attending drama and language course are half as the numbers of women. But they attend twice as much as womens and approximately 25 people in painting coures.
We can easily see that the people attending these evening courses are mostly at the age of 50 or over with 46% in total, age of 40 to 49 are 26%,age of 30-39 years old are 16%,the young generation from 20-29 years old are 11% and aged under 20 are only 5%.It seems to be not so many young participants under the age of 20 have interest in the course compare to a huge amount of participants over 50.Overall the two charts show that most of the people attending the course are women and at high age since this is an adult education centre.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
...dult education centre in the year 2009. while the pie chart shows the percentage abou...
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Line 1, column 116, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “while” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...dult education centre in the year 2009. while the pie chart shows the percentage abou...
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Line 1, column 235, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'tended'.
Suggestion: tended
...mbers of women attending the course are tend to be much higher than the numbers of m...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: With
...n the numbers of menexcept in sculpture.With the lead in the amount of people, langu...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...se womens attend the most with 40 people , following is painting 30 people,drama10...
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Suggestion: In
...ma10 people and sculptureabout 5 people.In the other hand mens seem to be less int...
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Suggestion: It
...d are 11% and aged under 20 are only 5%.It seems to be not so many young participa...
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Suggestion: Overall
...o a huge amount of participants over 50.Overall the two charts show that most of the pe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1036.0 965.302439024 107% => OK
No of words: 228.0 196.424390244 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.54385964912 4.92477711251 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.88582923847 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57400523429 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.530701754386 0.547539520022 97% => OK
syllable_count: 317.7 283.868780488 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 176.620512839 43.030603864 410% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 172.666666667 112.824112599 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.0 22.9334400587 166% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.23603664747 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422584819934 0.215688989381 196% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.242439668129 0.103423049105 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129545257075 0.0843802449381 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.330838949166 0.15604864568 212% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0530728516983 0.0819641961636 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.0 13.2329268293 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.83 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.3012195122 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.64 11.4140731707 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 27.0 40.7170731707 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 11.0658536585 172% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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