The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening course at an adult education centre in year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

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The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening course at an adult education centre in year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

The given bar graph shows the information on the number of men and women enrolled in various evening courses in year 2009 . The pie chart illustrates the percentages of mature students according to their ages .
It can be seen from the bar graph that number of women who attended language , painting and drama classes were higher in number as compared to men . 20 females attended drama course which doubled the number of males . women topped at 40 in language course whereas men were 20 in number. However in sculpture course , the number of women went down to 5 .

The popularity of these courses increased with age . The percentage of young people below the age of forty was less than 20 % . The number of people enrolled in these courses above the age of 50 peaked at 42 %
Overall , women dominated the evening courses except sculpture course . The courses were more attractive to the older adults particularly in the age 50 or over age group

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 777.0 965.302439024 80% => OK
No of words: 163.0 196.424390244 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76687116564 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.57311423478 3.73543355544 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49658211609 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.564417177914 0.547539520022 103% => OK
syllable_count: 243.0 283.868780488 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.278546109 43.030603864 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.7 112.824112599 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.6 5.23603664747 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 70.0 1.69756097561 4124% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 3.70975609756 243% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476137526585 0.215688989381 221% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187130304507 0.103423049105 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0950373962765 0.0843802449381 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.286218566572 0.15604864568 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0890809809916 0.0819641961636 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.09 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.63 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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