The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.
Given are the bar charts delineating the figure of the male and female learners taking part in four distinct classes, namely drama, painting, sculpture and language as well as the pie chart depicting the proportion of students categorised in five certain age ranges in a training institution in 2009.
Perceptibly, in all of the subjects, female students were higher in number compared to males, except for sculpture. Furthermore, the older the learners were, the more their percentages were.
From the bar chart, obviously, the number of females in drama and language doubled that of males with 20% and 40% respectively, while the reverse was true for sculpture with 10% of men. Besides, notwithstanding by far the highest figure of men with 25% in painting compared to the other classes, it was still 5% lower than that of the opposite gender.
When it comes to the pie chart, the under-20s accounted for the lowest percentage of the class attendees with 5%, while the opposite was true for the over-50s with 42%. Second in terms of popularity was the 40 to 49-year-olds when 26% was reported, which was 10% and 15% higher than the rate of people in their thirties and twenties in turn.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Given are the bar charts delineating the figure o...
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Line 2, column 17, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...g institution in 2009. Perceptibly, in all of the subjects, female students were higher i...
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Line 2, column 59, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: higher
...l of the subjects, female students were higher in number compared to males, except for sculpture...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, furthermore, second, still, well, while, except for, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 990.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 202.0 196.424390244 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90099009901 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72198008277 2.65546596893 103% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.579207920792 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 288.9 283.868780488 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.7872499424 43.030603864 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.428571429 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8571428571 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2857142857 5.23603664747 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119187031062 0.215688989381 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0520161346656 0.103423049105 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478240003273 0.0843802449381 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0730394090427 0.15604864568 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462092878528 0.0819641961636 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.06136585366 113% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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