The bar chart below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different attractions in Bangkok

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of tourists to Thailand who visited four different attractions in Bangkok.

The bar chart compares the number of tourists who visit four different tourist attractions in Thailand over a four-year period.

Overall, from 2014 to 2017, the figure of people who visit china town experienced fluctuations, and the wax museum visitors showed a gradually increase, meanwhile, the number of tourists for sea world and Bangkok zoo had a decline.

china town was the least attractive place for tourists in 2014, at around 18%. However, it became the most popular tourist attraction between 2015 and 2016, with reaching around 85% and 100% respectively, and then the figure dramatically dropped to 10% in 2017. The percentage of people visited wax museum steadily grew from 45% (2014) to 85 %( 2016), and then slightly dropped back to 75% in 2017.

The number of visitors chose sea world was the highest in 2014, at about 70%, and then shrinking to 20%. As for the Bangkok zoo , the number of people went there was 50%, then people did not show too much interest about this place, from 20%(2015) dropping to 10%(2017).

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 132, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('gradually') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...ons, and the wax museum visitors showed a gradually increase, meanwhile, the number of tourists for ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: China
...world and Bangkok zoo had a decline. china town was the least attractive place for...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 128, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...shrinking to 20%. As for the Bangkok zoo , the number of people went there was 50%...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, then, while, as for

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 857.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 174.0 196.424390244 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92528735632 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.63192868298 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50911947242 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.597701149425 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.482926829268 828% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2876564124 43.030603864 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.428571429 112.824112599 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8571428571 22.9334400587 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.57142857143 5.23603664747 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282525487366 0.215688989381 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.139056236923 0.103423049105 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.167631499018 0.0843802449381 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.211711555882 0.15604864568 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.191790262423 0.0819641961636 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 61.2550243902 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.91 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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