The bar chart gives us the information about the life expectancy in Japan Korea United states and Indonesia and the table shows us the change in the life expectancy between 1953 and 2008

Essay topics:

The bar chart gives us the information about the life expectancy in Japan ,Korea, United states and Indonesia and the table shows us the change in the life expectancy between 1953 and 2008.

The given bar chart illustrates the information about the life expectancy in different four countries .The tabular chart compares the information about change in the life expectancy in 1953 and 2008.

It is crystal clear that , the highest life expectancy in Japan at more than 80 followed by Korea at less than 80 in 2008. The lowest life expectancy in Indonesia in 2008 . It was negeligible in 2008 the life expectancy of USA was 76 years.

Probing further ,maximum life expectancy was Indonesia Which grew by 15.7 years .An increase can be seen in Korea life expectancy at 12.5 years .There was a growth in Japan and United states of 3.5 and 3 respectively. Which was minimum than other countries.

Overall, maximum life expectancy in Japan and minimum in Indonesia .

Votes
Average: 7.7 (13 votes)

Comments

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 641.0 965.302439024 66% => OK
No of words: 130.0 196.424390244 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93076923077 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.37664837539 3.73543355544 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76284843032 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 72.0 106.607317073 68% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553846153846 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 197.1 283.868780488 69% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 67.7124773719 43.030603864 157% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.5714285714 112.824112599 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5714285714 22.9334400587 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.285714285714 5.23603664747 5% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 1.69756097561 707% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.473668998144 0.215688989381 220% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.240427404152 0.103423049105 232% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.135558622203 0.0843802449381 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.31129724564 0.15604864568 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0842452861331 0.0819641961636 103% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.44 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 24.0 40.7170731707 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 11.4329268293 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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