The bar chart shows active participation rates in top ten sports in 1998 and 2005

Essay topics:

The bar chart shows active participation rates in top ten sports in 1998 and 2005.

The bar chart provides information about the proportion of people playing ten different sports in Canada in 1998 and 2005.

In general, the percentage of sport participants in Canada decreased in the period from 1998 to 2005. It was immuatably true that the popularity of golf was the widest.

In 1998, the data of tennis was 16% while the percentage of golf participants was approximate 23%. Ice hookey came in second with 17%. Another popular sports in this period was baseball which had the proportion of people playing was approximate the figure of ice hookey. Whereas, the percentage of people joining in remaining sport activities was almost under 10%.

After 7 years, the figure of sport participants experienced the slight decrease. Golf continued to be the most favourite sport, however, the percentage of golf fans dropped slowly to 21%. The data of ice hookey saw the similar fluctuation which went down approximate 1%. In contrast, baseball underwent the significant decline to the same figure of volleyball with only 7% people playing. While almost sports tended to be less popular, soccer was the only physical activity which people would rather playing in 2005 than 1998. From 9% in 1998, the percentage of soccer players went up slowly to 10% in 2005.

Votes
Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
This essay topic by users
Post date Users Rates Link to Content
2023-08-30 chau hoang 78 view
2023-08-30 chau hoang view
2023-08-30 chau hoang view
2023-07-04 Hai Anh view
2022-02-13 phuongchi17899 73 view

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 272, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...s approximate the figure of ice hookey. Whereas, the percentage of people joining in re...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 501, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'play'
Suggestion: play
...ical activity which people would rather playing in 2005 than 1998. From 9% in 1998, the...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, whereas, while, in contrast, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 6.8 15% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1067.0 965.302439024 111% => OK
No of words: 210.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08095238095 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80675409584 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68938030779 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 108.0 106.607317073 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514285714286 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 308.7 283.868780488 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 27.4349149117 43.030603864 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.0769230769 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1538461538 22.9334400587 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92307692308 5.23603664747 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241285286129 0.215688989381 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933659399343 0.103423049105 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0958987169433 0.0843802449381 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186165342252 0.15604864568 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0830249702101 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.2329268293 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 11.4140731707 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 42.0 40.7170731707 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.4329268293 61% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

---------------------

Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.