The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart
shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese or severely obese in2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The bar chart illustrates the percentage of overweight or obese adults in a country from 1965 to 2015, while the pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were obese, overweight, severely obese, healthy or underweight in 2015.
Overall, there was an upward trend in the percentage of overweight or obese adults during 1965 to 2015. And in 2015, obese adults accounted for the most percentage while the least were severely obese adults.
In the bar chart, from 1965 to 1985, the percentage of overweight or obese adults was below 50%. Since then, there was a boom from just under 50% in 1985 to more than 70% in 2015. In 30 years, after 1985, the percentage significantly went up to more than 55% in 1995. It climbed to 70% in 2005 and dropped to 70% in 2015. In the pie chart, we can see that in 2015 obese adults accounted for the most with 34%. The next two types are overweight and healthy or underweight adults, each accounting for 31% and 29%. On contrast, adults who were severely obese took a tiny proportion with only 6%.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, then, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 859.0 965.302439024 89% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.61827956989 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50531288858 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 91.0 106.607317073 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489247311828 0.547539520022 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 242.1 283.868780488 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 89.4160744777 43.030603864 208% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 107.375 112.824112599 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.25 22.9334400587 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.875 5.23603664747 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.500592583283 0.215688989381 232% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.20356245245 0.103423049105 197% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.196491285781 0.0843802449381 233% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.414779161513 0.15604864568 266% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.110708167753 0.0819641961636 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 61.2550243902 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.48 8.06136585366 80% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 11.4329268293 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.