The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese (too fat or much too fat) in one country from 1965 to 2015. The pie chart
shows the proportion of adults who were overweight, obese, or severely obese in2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
The proportion of people who were overweight or obese in the period of 50 years between 1965 and 2015 is revealed by the bar chart while the figure for too fat or much too fat adults in 2015 is demonstrated by the pie chart.
Overall, it can be seen clearly that the percentage of adults saw a dramatic rise from 1965 to 2015, especially in 2015, the pie chart gives the figure for overweight adults showing the result of this rise.
Looking at the details, as regards the bar chart, in 1965s, it saw a slight increase from around 45% adults to roughly half a hundred in 1975, then in next 10 years, this figure had no change. After that, the figure continuously soared sharply and stopped at approximately 75% of people who are obese in 2015.
The ie chart is the evidence for this negative rise. The people who were obese accounted for just over one-third percentage which is the largest proportion, whereas, that of adults whose health were in danger for obesity made up the lowest percentage, at 6%. Overweight and healthy or underweight figures also were the large figures, at 31% and 29% respectively.
- The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes
- The diagrams below show the stages and equipment used in the cement making process and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes
- The bar chart shows the percentage of adults who were overweight or obese too fat or much too fat in one country from 1965 to 2015 The pie chart shows the proportion of adults who were overweight obese or severely obese in2015 Summarise the information by 69
- Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems To what extent do you agree or disagree What other measures do you think might be effective 67
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...period of 50 years between 1965 and 2015 is revealed by the bar chart while the f...
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..., this figure had no change. After that, the figure continuously soared sharply a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, so, then, third, whereas, while, as regards
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 922.0 965.302439024 96% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68020304569 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54791997709 2.65546596893 96% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.578680203046 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 272.7 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 61.056013092 43.030603864 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.714285714 112.824112599 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1428571429 22.9334400587 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.85714285714 5.23603664747 150% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.469496983793 0.215688989381 218% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.196098396145 0.103423049105 190% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.157645240165 0.0843802449381 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.293676762612 0.15604864568 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.149716034531 0.0819641961636 183% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 61.2550243902 98% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.16 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.06136585366 102% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 11.4329268293 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.0658536585 163% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.