The bar graph below shows the numbers of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia in the year 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided bar graph depicts the information about the number of men and women employed in different job types in Australia in 2003. Overall, in the provided 7 job types, only in professionals and Clerical job type women are in more number. For rest of the job types men are in highest number when compared to women.

As is presented in the graph more strikingly 900 a significant number of male are employed as Tradespersons, by contrary only 1 out 10 women are employed in this job type. In professionals and Clerical job type all the people are in good number, but women are slightly higher in number than men. As is observed in the graph , labourers job type is low preferred by both men and women. Semi professional is third most job type of female employees, yet men are in good number than women. A glance at graph reveals that, only 1 in 5 of women are as managers, on the other hand 3 in 5 of men are in managerial position. In production job type only few women are employed, majority are men.

In conclusion, all the job types except two job type are employed by men in more number and labourer job type is least attracted by people.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 231, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'number' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: number
...nals and Clerical job type women are in more number. For rest of the job types men are in h...
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Line 1, column 278, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'in the highest'.
Suggestion: in the highest
...mber. For rest of the job types men are in highest number when compared to women. As ...
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Line 4, column 45, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...s presented in the graph more strikingly 900 a significant number of male are emp...
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Line 4, column 136, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Tradespersons, by contrary only 1 out 10 women are employed in this job type. In ...
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Line 4, column 272, Rule ID: ADJECTIVE_IN_ATTRIBUTE[1]
Message: A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.
Suggestion: higher
... in good number, but women are slightly higher in number than men. As is observed in the graph ,...
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Line 4, column 326, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...er than men. As is observed in the graph , labourers job type is low preferred by ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, third, in conclusion, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 7.0 243% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 947.0 965.302439024 98% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.48815165877 4.92477711251 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6519126342 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.45971563981 0.547539520022 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 301.5 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.459973736 43.030603864 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7 112.824112599 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.2 5.23603664747 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 6.0 1.69756097561 353% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243416473638 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137114029751 0.103423049105 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0741570211845 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.210636534087 0.15604864568 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0482267250557 0.0819641961636 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.2329268293 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 11.4140731707 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.06136585366 95% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.