The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013

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The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

The bar chart compares international revenues of 5 world-prevalent brands of phone over a 4-year period

Overall, throughout the examined period, while Samsung progressively dominated the mobile phone market, Nokia failed to maintain its highest position in terms of phone sales. Whereas, ZTE’s sales data remained nearly unchanged from 2009 to 2013

In 2009, the profit of Samsung was around 250 million, which then surged with a two-fold increase to roughly 450 million in 2013, the highest revenue among all brands at that time. The same pattern was witnessed in the figure of Apple but with much lower number. Specifically, Apple also recorded a rocket in its mobile phone revenue when their profit significantly grew by about 120 million in 4 years. On the other hand, the global sales of ZTE phones was not seen with much dramatic changes in these years

As far as the revenue of Nokia and LG phones are considered, these two brands bore some resemblance when they both saw declines in their bussiness. In detail, although Nokia was the most favourite phone brand in 2009, receiving approximately 420 million as profit; after a steady decrease, it plummeted to not above 250 million in 2013, which was nearly 100 million higher than that of LG, the brand that also registered a gradual drop by around 50 million

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 176, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ghest position in terms of phone sales. Whereas, ZTE’s sales data remained nearly uncha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, then, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 11.0 5.60731707317 196% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1110.0 965.302439024 115% => OK
No of words: 221.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02262443439 4.92477711251 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61792764935 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 106.607317073 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.628959276018 0.547539520022 115% => OK
syllable_count: 324.0 283.868780488 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 36.0 22.4926829268 160% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 81.2773031049 43.030603864 189% => OK
Chars per sentence: 185.0 112.824112599 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 36.8333333333 22.9334400587 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.66666666667 5.23603664747 185% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225198269661 0.215688989381 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103120601511 0.103423049105 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054467386859 0.0843802449381 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143898366701 0.15604864568 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.019957747605 0.0819641961636 24% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.6 13.2329268293 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.4 61.2550243902 71% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.43 11.4140731707 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.71 8.06136585366 120% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 40.7170731707 147% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.4 10.9970731707 149% => OK
text_standard: 21.0 11.0658536585 190% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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