The chart below shows the rate of males and females who were overweight in Austalia from 1980 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
The graph illustrates what percentages of Australia men and women overweight between 1980 to 2010.
It can be seen from the chart that the percentage of Australia men steadily increased and reached the peak from around 45% to 70% in the first two decades. After that, the rate suffered a slight decrease and ended up with 68% in 2010. In terms of the figure for women, it showed the same trend as the men's one until 2000 which increased from 30% to 50% and remained the same figure in 2010.
Furthermore, in the first year, the figure for men was almost 1.5 times for women's figure, what is more, the men's number in 1990 was roughly 10% more than one for women, while the male's data in the last decade was one fifth more than female's in the same time period.
Overall, the number of overweight men was far more than one for women in Australia.
- the diagram shows how an office building looks at the present and the plan for its future development 57
- With the increasing use of mobile phone and computer, the number of people who write letter has decreased. As a result, letter writing will disappear soon. Do you agree or disagree? How do you think letter writing is important？ 89
- Young people who commit serious crimes such as a rubbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults.To what extent do you agree or disagree? 78
- The diagram below shows how fruit is canned. 11
- The diagram below shows how fruit is canned. 11
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 181, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'males'' or 'male's', 'malis's'?
Suggestion: males'; male's; malis's
... 10% more than one for women, while the males data in the last decade was one fifth m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, while, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 691.0 965.302439024 72% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.424390244 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.42948717949 4.92477711251 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.19432168699 2.65546596893 83% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.570512820513 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 204.3 283.868780488 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7801838699 43.030603864 151% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.166666667 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.16666666667 5.23603664747 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10319939582 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0627540808937 0.103423049105 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0270586593766 0.0843802449381 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.070349379561 0.15604864568 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415630143813 0.0819641961636 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.47 61.2550243902 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.71 11.4140731707 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 28.0 40.7170731707 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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