The chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 to 2010

Essay topics:

The chart shows the percentage of males and females who were overweight in Australia from 1980 to 2010

The bar chart show the proportion of men and women who were overweight between 1980 and 2010 in Australia.

In general, the number of overweight people increased years after years and males were accounted for this more than females.

For men, the figures started at 40% and kept on rising in the next two decades up to 65%. From 2000 to 2010, the percentage of overweight males slightly declined to 61%.

In the other hand, the proportion of women who were overweight in 1990 were 10% lower than men. The next 10% this number rose sharply to 45% and remained increasing up to 52% in 2000. In the first ten years of the twenty-first century, this number stayed the same.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (2 votes)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 24.0 33.7804878049 71% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 559.0 965.302439024 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 120.0 196.424390244 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65833333333 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.30975091965 3.73543355544 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40761234883 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 70.0 106.607317073 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.583333333333 0.547539520022 107% => OK
syllable_count: 151.2 283.868780488 53% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 14.8296448827 43.030603864 34% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.8571428571 112.824112599 71% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1428571429 22.9334400587 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.42857142857 5.23603664747 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.339611360666 0.215688989381 157% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155783492149 0.103423049105 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.170649142736 0.0843802449381 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217881877612 0.15604864568 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.15183838264 0.0819641961636 185% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.1 13.2329268293 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.45 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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