The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and1995 and Austrailia s share of the Japanese tourists market Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below You should write at least 1

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The charts below show the number of Japanese tourists travelling abroad between 1985 and1995 and Austrailia's share of the Japanese tourists market. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below. You should write at least 150 words.

The provided bar chart demonstrates how many Japanese travelled overseas over a decade from 1985 to 1995. Plus, the given line gragh reveals the data on Austrailia's tourist market share about Japanese during the period.
Overall, more and more Japanese went abroad throughout the year. The general trend in Austrailia's tourism industry with regard to Japan showed dramatic growth, although there was a decline between 1988 and 1989.
In detail, the number of Japanese tourist started with about 5 million peopme in 1985 and the record kept going up to about 11 million tourists in 1990 before going through a slight decline in 1991 with just over 10 million visitors. After 1991, it regained the figure upto 12 million people in 1993 as well as it outnumbered 15 million travellers who went abroad.
Moving on to Austrailia's tourism market, the 2% of 5 million Japanese visited Austrailia in 1985 and the percentage became the twofold of that in 1987. However, it underwent a great deal of decrease between 1988 and 1989 to 4.1% before accumulating more Japanese tourists over 6% of that as its top record in 1994.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, well, as to, as well as, with regard to

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 33.7804878049 118% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 914.0 965.302439024 95% => OK
No of words: 188.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86170212766 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70287850203 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50157827049 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.590425531915 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 1.0 8.94146341463 11% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 188.0 22.4926829268 836% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 0.0 43.030603864 0% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 914.0 112.824112599 810% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 188.0 22.9334400587 820% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 48.0 5.23603664747 917% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.243889058281 0.215688989381 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.243889058281 0.103423049105 236% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152107896854 0.15604864568 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495637010663 0.0819641961636 60% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 95.5 13.2329268293 722% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -102.42 61.2550243902 -167% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 74.3 10.3012195122 721% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.09 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 16.32 8.06136585366 202% => Dale chall readability score is high.
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 52.0 11.4329268293 455% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 77.2 10.9970731707 702% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 52.0 11.0658536585 470% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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