The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

Essay topics:

The charts below show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

Given are the pie charts comparing the changes in workforce in three main industries between town A and B over half a decade, from 1960 to 2010.
As can be seen, manufacturing sector attracted by far the largest number of laborers in general. However, the workforce in this sector had a tendency to decrease, while the services’ followed the opposite pattern.
In 1960, manufacturing was the dominant industry in both town A and B. Particularly, the workers in this industry constituted 41% in town A, and in town B the figure accounted for three-quarters of the workforce. Regarding other sectors, the sales and services’ workers shared relatively the same amount of 30% in town A, while in town B the sales’ data almost doubled the services’.
Half a decade witnessed a significant change in workers’ shifting from manufacturing to services sector. Specifically in town A, the proportion of employees in the services rose almost twice as much as its data in 1960, becoming the new leading industry ultimately. In contrast, the manufacturing and sales shared the same downward pattern, declining to approximately 20% of workers in 2010. Regarding town B, although manufacturing was still a major sector, its figure fell sharply by 20%. The services' employees doubled and ended up at 25%, while the sales' ones increased only a negligible amount.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
Given are the pie charts comparing the changes in...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, regarding, still, while, in contrast, in general

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1141.0 965.302439024 118% => OK
No of words: 221.0 196.424390244 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1628959276 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.85565412703 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12318824039 2.65546596893 118% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 106.607317073 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542986425339 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 343.8 283.868780488 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6003685481 43.030603864 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.727272727 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0909090909 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237123393797 0.215688989381 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0971046467309 0.103423049105 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640791955642 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153057130305 0.15604864568 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0641304344608 0.0819641961636 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 13.2329268293 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 61.2550243902 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.06136585366 112% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 40.7170731707 150% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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