The charts below show the percentage of people working different in sectors in town A and town B in 1960 2010

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The charts below show the percentage of people working different in sectors in town A and town B in 1960, 2010.

The given chart exhibits the proportion of people working in certain fields in two towns, A and B in 1960 and 2010.

Overall, in town A, only Services experienced an upward pattern in the percentage of people working in, while in town B, only the percentage of workers in Manufacturing declined.

As can be seen from the chart of town A, during the time of the half of century, both Manufacturing and Sales witnessed decreases in the quantity of people working in, from 41% to 20% and 30% to 16%, respectively. However, the opposite trend happened in the proportion of people in the Services field, which started from the last rank (29%) and rised nearly double to rank first (64%).

Turning to the map of town B, during the period, the percentage of people working in Sales increased slightly by 2% (22% in 2010), while that proportion in Services went up to 25% in 2010 and surpassed the quantity in Sales. However, the percentage of workers in Manufacturing declined from 70% to 53%, comprised a half of the whole chart but still held the first rank.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 369, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...le chart but still held the first rank.
^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, still, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 873.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.6935483871 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68598297966 2.65546596893 101% => OK
Unique words: 94.0 106.607317073 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505376344086 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 249.3 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 22.4926829268 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 37.1188032614 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.5 112.824112599 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.0 22.9334400587 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336697022791 0.215688989381 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170252950892 0.103423049105 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0928188471037 0.0843802449381 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223064175822 0.15604864568 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0556178794359 0.0819641961636 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 13.2329268293 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.39 61.2550243902 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 10.3012195122 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 11.4140731707 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 8.06136585366 96% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 40.7170731707 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.4329268293 118% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.9970731707 131% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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