The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed employed or further education in 1980 1990 and 2000

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The charts detail the proportion of Australian secondary school graduates who were unemployed, employed or further education in 1980, 1990, and 2000.

The given pie charts depict the changes in the rate of students’ status after graduating from an Australia secondary school in three separate years 1986, 1990 and 2000.
Overall , it is easy to see that the figure for employed people witnessed a growth throughout the years, while that of students who were unemployed and continued with further education had a fall. Remarkably, the proportion of unemployed people made up the smallest amount during these years.
Regarding the category of” employed” , there was a pretty noticeable increase without fluctuations over the period. This percentage jumped by 15% over the 30-year period.
On the other hand, most of Australia secondary school leavers chose to pursue higher levels of education in 1980 but then 10 years later, this number plunged to 38% and remained stable until 2000. Whereas, the figure for those who failed to seek employment in Australia always made up the smallest proportion, at only 10% in 1980 and after a minimal rise of 2% , it finall declined to 8% in 2000.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, regarding, second, then, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 33.7804878049 101% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 872.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 171.0 196.424390244 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09941520468 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.61617157096 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64535179407 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.684210526316 0.547539520022 125% => OK
syllable_count: 248.4 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.4926829268 107% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.6816009981 43.030603864 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.571428571 112.824112599 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4285714286 22.9334400587 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318335110364 0.215688989381 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110471947926 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693442433849 0.0843802449381 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150495945803 0.15604864568 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715505040314 0.0819641961636 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.2329268293 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 61.2550243902 91% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 11.4140731707 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.06136585366 106% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 40.7170731707 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.9970731707 105% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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