The charts show the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports in Australia in 2003

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The charts show the percentage of boys and girls aged 5-14 taking part in cultural activities and sports in Australia in 2003

This bar chart illustrates the statistic of children from both gender aged from 5 to 14 years old participating in extracurricular activities in Australia in 2003.

Taking everything into consideration, the girls was in favor of cultural activities more than the boys. On the contrary, learning how to play musical instrument and playing sport were popular amongst the opposite gender.

More than half of the cultural activities were partook predominantly by schoolgirls. The percentages of both gender remain unchanged in drama and singing, the girls were roughly 1 percent higher than the boys. On the other hand, the boys’ percentage in playing musical instrument is greater than the other sex by 1/20 times.

It is apparent from the bar chart that sport was by far schoolboy’s most preferred activity since younger boys tend to be more hyperactive. Thus the percentage of the girls was under approx. 15 percent compare to the opposite sex.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'partaken'.
Suggestion: partaken
...an half of the cultural activities were partook predominantly by schoolgirls. The perce...
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Line 7, column 146, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...unger boys tend to be more hyperactive. Thus the percentage of the girls was under a...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
thus, on the contrary, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 810.0 965.302439024 84% => OK
No of words: 153.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29411764706 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.51700396316 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0741196231 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 92.0 106.607317073 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.601307189542 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 239.4 283.868780488 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.568841771 43.030603864 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.0 22.9334400587 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.44444444444 5.23603664747 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.30219991397 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105796827995 0.103423049105 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0648153082107 0.0843802449381 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167176574043 0.15604864568 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306078536362 0.0819641961636 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.11 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.06136585366 105% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.4329268293 79% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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