The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

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The charts show the percentage of people working in different sectors in town A and B in two years 1960 and 2010

The given pie chart illustrates how differently workers in 3 categories in town A and B altered in a 50-year period

Overall, while sales in town B always keep its position as the hottest sector, there was a transformation in the most taken-job in town a from 1960 to 2010

Regarding town A, it was sales that allocated the most in 1960 with 41%, other careers like manufacturing and services had the pretty close percentages of workers which was around 30%. While in 2010, manufacturing began to be the most popular sector with 64% of total worker, higher than that in 1960 35%. The percentage of people working in sales and services just dropped to nearly half of it was in 1960, respectively 20% and 16%.

When it comes to town B, sales had a major role throughout a period of 50 years. Specifically, the ratio allocated to this job was account the most of both 2 charts, though there was a dramatical decrease, with 70% in 1960 and 53% in 2010. Besides, manufacturing only attract 10% workers in 1960, however, this figure went up significantly more than twice as higher in 1960 with 25% in 2010. While the proportion in citizens working in services keep remainable.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, however, if, regarding, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 977.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71980676329 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79884887804 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 116.0 106.607317073 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56038647343 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 278.1 283.868780488 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 22.4926829268 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 124.748236256 43.030603864 290% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 139.571428571 112.824112599 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.5714285714 22.9334400587 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.42857142857 5.23603664747 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.293556156491 0.215688989381 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120060893129 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0715845905496 0.0843802449381 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.182395207391 0.15604864568 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256643213382 0.0819641961636 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.2329268293 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.42 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.69 11.4140731707 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.35 8.06136585366 104% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 40.7170731707 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 29.5 11.4329268293 258% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.9970731707 124% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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