The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.» You should write at least 150 words.

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The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

» You should write at least 150 words.

The figure depicts the consequences of a product which arise during its life cycle due to manufacturing in various stages.it is clearly seen that during seven stages from planning and design to recycling ,it has a directs effect on environmental pollution.

The first step involves planning and design of the consumer product ,which is the send to the factories where they modelled and the production of the product takes place in third step .it is clear that in the second and third step a material is consumed and large amount of CO2 is produced which has direct negative effect on environment.then the product is sent for packing and distribution.which involves the use of heavy vehicle which consume more fuel and also for packaging the plastic covers.

Afterwards the material is sold to the consumers s,which uses plastic bags.which are again hazardous material for pollution. After the usage if the product is dispose then it causes serious environmental pollution,on the other hand if recycled has less effect one ecosystem.

However the customers provided the feedback for improvement of the product so that its effects should be minimize.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 19, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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The figure depicts the consequences of a product which aris...
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Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...es from planning and design to recycling ,it has a directs effect on environmenta...
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Line 1, column 233, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...to recycling ,it has a directs effect on environmental pollution. The first ...
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Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: ,
...nning and design of the consumer product ,which is the send to the factories where...
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Line 5, column 79, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
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...esign of the consumer product ,which is the send to the factories where they modelled a...
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Line 5, column 124, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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...end to the factories where they modelled and the production of the product takes ...
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Line 5, column 185, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...of the product takes place in third step .it is clear that in the second and third...
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Line 5, column 364, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... on environment.then the product is sent for packing and distribution.which invol...
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Line 9, column 51, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: , which
... the material is sold to the consumers s,which uses plastic bags.which are again hazar...
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Line 9, column 160, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
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Suggestion: disposed
...tion. After the usage if the product is dispose then it causes serious environmental po...
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Line 9, column 214, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...t causes serious environmental pollution,on the other hand if recycled has less eff...
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Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...cycled has less effect one ecosystem. However the customers provided the feedback for...
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Line 11, column 75, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
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... feedback for improvement of the product so that its effects should be minimize. ...
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Line 11, column 107, Rule ID: SHOULD_BE_DO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'minimized'?
Suggestion: minimized
... product so that its effects should be minimize.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, then, third, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 3.15609756098 349% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 10.0 5.60731707317 178% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 20.0 33.7804878049 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 978.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 186.0 196.424390244 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25806451613 4.92477711251 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69299088775 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94680553332 2.65546596893 111% => OK
Unique words: 111.0 106.607317073 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596774193548 0.547539520022 109% => OK
syllable_count: 297.9 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 8.94146341463 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.4926829268 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 144.708534648 43.030603864 336% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 195.6 112.824112599 173% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.2 22.9334400587 162% => OK
Discourse Markers: 14.6 5.23603664747 279% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 1.69756097561 825% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105351378574 0.215688989381 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0606104601221 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335273245777 0.0843802449381 40% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0716306976353 0.15604864568 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0229013380418 0.0819641961636 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.9 13.2329268293 165% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.92 61.2550243902 55% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.3012195122 172% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.82 11.4140731707 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.06136585366 125% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 40.7170731707 133% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 11.4329268293 241% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 16.8 10.9970731707 153% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 11.0658536585 253% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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