The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.» You should write at least 150 words.

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The diagram below shows the environmental issues raised by a product over its lifecycle.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

» You should write at least 150 words.

he figure depicts the consequences of a product which arise during its life-cycle due to manufacturing in various stages.it is clearly seen that during seven stages from planning and design to recycling ,it has a directs effect on environmental pollution. The first step involves planning and design of the consumer product ,which is the send to the factories where they modelled and in third step the product creation takes place .it is clear that in the second and third step the material produces a large amount of CO2 , which has direct negative effect on environment. Next,the packing and distribution of the product takes place. The packaging of the product is takes place using plastic covers .The product is carried in vehicles for distribution to local stores ,which consumes more fuel and causes health hazards.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
he figure depicts the consequences of a pr...
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Line 1, column 4, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'figures'.
Suggestion: figures
he figure depicts the consequences of a product w...
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Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...es from planning and design to recycling ,it has a directs effect on environmental...
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Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nning and design of the consumer product ,which is the send to the factories where...
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Line 1, column 335, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...esign of the consumer product ,which is the send to the factories where they modelled an...
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Line 1, column 431, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...rd step the product creation takes place .it is clear that in the second and third...
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Line 1, column 522, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... material produces a large amount of CO2 , which has direct negative effect on env...
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Line 1, column 578, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...ect negative effect on environment. Next,the packing and distribution of the product...
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Line 1, column 700, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...duct is takes place using plastic covers .The product is carried in vehicles for d...
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Line 1, column 702, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...ct is takes place using plastic covers .The product is carried in vehicles for dist...
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Line 1, column 769, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ehicles for distribution to local stores ,which consumes more fuel and causes heal...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, third

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 18.0 33.7804878049 53% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 687.0 965.302439024 71% => OK
No of words: 134.0 196.424390244 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12686567164 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.40232815919 3.73543355544 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70655354626 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 83.0 106.607317073 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.619402985075 0.547539520022 113% => OK
syllable_count: 207.9 283.868780488 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.4926829268 147% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 94.7589045948 43.030603864 220% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 171.75 112.824112599 152% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5 22.9334400587 146% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.25 5.23603664747 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 1.0 3.83414634146 26% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 1.69756097561 648% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.105042716301 0.215688989381 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614576759707 0.103423049105 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0215689657908 0.0843802449381 26% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105042716301 0.15604864568 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.5 13.2329268293 147% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 61.2550243902 62% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.3012195122 157% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.07 11.4140731707 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.06136585366 122% => OK
difficult_words: 39.0 40.7170731707 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.4329268293 166% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.9970731707 138% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 150 words wanted.
Minimum two paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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