The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermarkets and restaurants

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The diagram shows production of sugar by a German company for supermarkets and restaurants

The process to create a sugar in one of German company for supermarkets and restaurants supplies is illustrated in the picture. The most striking feature is that sugar-make activity is consist of eight different stages which occurs from the upstream operation to the downstream ones where the pure form of sugar being delivered to the single business who need it.

In the upstream operation, It begins with sugarcane harvesting activity which is located in tropical region, far from German. It is then collected in one of rough-processing point where those sugarcane is being crushed to collect it juice containing inside followed by partial filtration, first filtration stage in this process to get the raw sugar. These raw sugar then shipped to the main company in German and by that, the downstream operation is started. In this site, a complete purification is being held by melting and filtering it to lift its contamination or unused ingredient and continue to crystalized and dried it to produce a pure and dry crystal-form of sugar. Packaging activity after the least step become the end of this making process of sugar and delivering it to supermarkets and restaurants.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'consisted'.
Suggestion: consisted
... feature is that sugar-make activity is consist of eight different stages which occurs ...
^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 187, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this sugarcane' or 'those sugarcanes'?
Suggestion: this sugarcane; those sugarcanes
... in one of rough-processing point where those sugarcane is being crushed to collect it juice co...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 234, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'juices'?
Suggestion: juices
...ugarcane is being crushed to collect it juice containing inside followed by partial f...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 15.0 5.60731707317 268% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 991.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 193.0 196.424390244 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13471502591 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72725689877 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99388622378 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569948186528 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 311.4 283.868780488 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.4926829268 120% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 50.5758674404 43.030603864 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.571428571 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5714285714 22.9334400587 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.14285714286 5.23603664747 41% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.83414634146 52% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.223049785945 0.215688989381 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.122895943641 0.103423049105 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125980386005 0.0843802449381 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.198565598628 0.15604864568 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0585735296613 0.0819641961636 71% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.2329268293 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 61.2550243902 72% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.3012195122 134% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.77 11.4140731707 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.31 8.06136585366 115% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.4329268293 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.9970731707 116% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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