The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950

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The diagrams below show the changes that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950.

The maps display the modifications that have taken place at West Park Secondary School since its construction in 1950. In common, it can be seen that the school had undergone some significant changes throughout the period with the expansion of the building, as well as the addition of a sports field and car park.
To begin , 3 blocks of houses which was located in west of the school, were removed in 1980. And instead of them were built car park and science block. In addition to a farmland, which was located in south of the houses, was developed into a sports field for children in 1980.
However, in 2010, the school's main building and the science block were still intact. But the car park was increased in size and whole area of the sports field was taken up by car park. Subsequently, the large area of the playground, which was situated in south of the school's main building, replaced by a sports field.
In brief, the area around West Park Secondary School has changed and optimised for schools' various needs , for 60 years. Moreover, a new science block and a large car park has been constructed and extended. Hence , the spot for the sports field and playground reduced.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 288, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... building, as well as the addition of a sports field and car park. To begin , 3 block...
^^^^^^
Line 2, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...f a sports field and car park. To begin , 3 blocks of houses which was located in...
^^
Line 2, column 166, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r park and science block. In addition to a farmland, which was located in south o...
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Line 4, column 105, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... and optimised for schools various needs , for 60 years. Moreover, a new science ...
^^
Line 4, column 130, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... various needs , for 60 years. Moreover, a new science block and a large car park...
^^
Line 4, column 213, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...has been constructed and extended. Hence , the spot for the sports field and playg...
^^
Line 4, column 233, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'sports'' or 'sport's'?
Suggestion: sports'; sport's
... and extended. Hence , the spot for the sports field and playground reduced.
^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, hence, however, if, moreover, second, so, still, well, in addition, in brief, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 6.8 147% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 33.7804878049 89% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 974.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 208.0 196.424390244 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.68269230769 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79765784423 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50035823223 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 107.0 106.607317073 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514423076923 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 268.2 283.868780488 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4698448965 43.030603864 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.5454545455 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9090909091 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 5.23603664747 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 1.13902439024 351% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.27939123274 0.215688989381 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119864126955 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.171768316917 0.0843802449381 204% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.193889475897 0.15604864568 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151357382378 0.0819641961636 185% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.1 13.2329268293 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 11.4140731707 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.11 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 34.0 40.7170731707 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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