The diagrams below show how chocolate is made and how the price of a chocolate bar is divided up among those involved in the process.
Summarise the information by choosing and reporting the key features, and make any relevant comparisons.
Write at least 150 words.
The first flow diagram illustrates the process of chocolate production, and the pie chart describes the percentage distribution of the price of a chocolate bar.
Overall, chocolate can be produced in two forms - one is chocolate bars, and the other is cocoa powder for the food industry. Also, we can see that the cost of ingredients and overheads alone comprised 37% of the price of a chocolate bar.
The first stage of making chocolate involves the grinding of cocoa, which gives cocoa liquor and some waste. Cocoa liquor can be used in two ways. The first way is pressing it to make cocoa powder, which can be sold to the food industry, and cocoa butter, which is used in making industrial chocolate. The second way is turning the cocoa liquor into industrial chocolate, which then becomes a chocolate bar when cocoa butter, sugar, and other ingredients are added.
A glance at the pie chart depicts that 37% of the total price of a chocolate bar goes to cost of ingredients and overheads. Supermarket received a full 34% of the price, and government’s tax is 15%. Only 10% is allocated to chocolate company and farmer gets the lowest proportion - just 4%.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ed in two forms - one is chocolate bars, and the other is cocoa powder for the fo...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'go'?
Suggestion: go
...% of the total price of a chocolate bar goes to cost of ingredients and overheads. S...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, second, so, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 33.7804878049 62% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 971.0 965.302439024 101% => OK
No of words: 200.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.855 4.92477711251 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76060309309 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71691990302 2.65546596893 102% => OK
Unique words: 103.0 106.607317073 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.515 0.547539520022 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 298.8 283.868780488 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.482926829268 1035% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 3.36585365854 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.7809475794 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.1 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 22.9334400587 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.23603664747 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 0.0 3.70975609756 0% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178447470265 0.215688989381 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0817337550955 0.103423049105 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055583461466 0.0843802449381 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134044803527 0.15604864568 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0474193237944 0.0819641961636 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.2329268293 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 11.4140731707 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.06136585366 98% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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