The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children s sports between 2008 and 2014 The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period

Essay topics:

The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children’s sports between 2008 and 2014. The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period.

One of the line graphs given presents the data of the average monthly spending in pounds on children’s sports for a period of six years from 2008 to 2014. The other graph compares the number of children participated in three different sports from 2008 to 2014. As it can be seen the average monthly spend on sports has increased over the time. And the children participated in football was always higher among the three sports given.
To begin, the average monthly spending has positively raisen. With a slight increase of 12 pounds ,the spend was approximately 32 pounds by the end of 2014 from 20 in 2008.Coming to the participation in the sports, football always had highest number of participants among the three sports including its slightest down trend in the year 2010.There was a little increase in the number of children interested in swimming from 2008(around 2 million) to 2014 (around 3.5 million).Athletics which has the lowest participation among the three sports till 2010 has surprisingly reached a 5 million in 2012.By the end of 2014 the participation in athletics was just lower than 5 million outweighing the participation in swimming.

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Average: 4.6 (4 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...n. With a slight increase of 12 pounds ,the spend was approximately 32 pounds by the end ...
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...unds by the end of 2014 from 20 in 2008.Coming to the participation in the sports, foo...
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...nd 2 million to 2014 around 3.5 million.Athletics which has the lowest participation amon...
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Discourse Markers used:
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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.224390243902 0.268076937826 84% => OK
Verbs: 0.117073170732 0.116061578633 101% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0780487804878 0.0759168565197 103% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0292682926829 0.0366838410393 80% => OK
Pronouns: 0.00975609756098 0.0131127313244 74% => OK
Prepositions: 0.175609756098 0.155750635184 113% => OK
Participles: 0.0487804878049 0.0379272487307 129% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.07028488997 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0243902439024 0.0210936926555 116% => OK
Particles: 0.00487804878049 0.00175180941692 278% => OK
Determiners: 0.126829268293 0.0948980150116 134% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00487804878049 0.00437022459523 112% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00487804878049 0.00967000014798 50% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1167.0 1161.00487805 101% => OK
No of words: 192.0 196.9 98% => OK
Chars per words: 6.078125 5.90752243213 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.72241943641 3.73763899035 100% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.375 0.337110787985 111% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.255208333333 0.247514529752 103% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.182291666667 0.171178102325 106% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.119791666667 0.112407865282 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07028488997 2.65546596893 116% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.520833333333 0.546246751206 95% => OK
Word variations: 44.9509490289 49.3433353143 91% => OK
How many sentences: 6.0 8.93414634146 67% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 23.0094962315 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 209.50450804 42.9750493124 488% => OK
Chars per sentence: 194.5 135.714022679 143% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.0 23.0094962315 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.166666666667 0.689975730869 24% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 3.84146341463 52% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 1.48048780488 743% => OK
Readability: 57.5208333333 47.7609492067 120% => OK
Elegance: 2.875 2.94281807926 98% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.556377232586 0.418131533498 133% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.14966875451 0.181151798455 83% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.108104684345 0.0850326197045 127% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.658324016382 0.706616315825 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.205873746724 0.157042692854 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.349645971039 0.228904883108 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120776767922 0.108899403657 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.625015625345 0.367819155151 170% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0 0.0812612215331 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.508829505483 0.316326947829 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.056506142085 0.0921553760075 61% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70731707317 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.08536585366 49% => OK
Positive topic words: 4.0 3.16585365854 126% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 3.02926829268 66% => OK
Total topic words: 6.0 7.1512195122 84% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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