The first chart below gives information about the money spent by British parents on their children s sports between 2008 and 2014 The second chart shows the number of children who participated in three sports in Britain over the same time period

The line graph illustrates the amount spent by British parents on their children's sport from 2008 to 2014. Whereas the second graph illustrates participation in 3 different sports among those football was the most popular, whereas athletics and swimming show advancement in the last of the period.
Around 20 million pounds are spent in 2008 which kept on increasing reaching around 33 million pounds at the end of this period. It can be seen the parents spent more over this period.
However in Britain over the same period, it can be seen football was the most popular among the three where it remains steady throughout this period reaching nearly 8.5 million participants from 7.5 in the beginning. Whereas in athletics and swimming the participation was nearly 0.5 and 2.3 respectively in 2008 and swimming increases at a steady pace throughout this period and end up having 4 million participants. Athletics starts with the lowest participation in the beginning but shows a gradual increase during 2011 reaching around 2.5 million participation and end up having nearly 4.9 million participants at the end of the period. It can be seen the participation extremely increased at the end then at the start of the period.
The line graph illustrates the amount spent by British parents on their children's sport from 2008 to 2014. Whereas the second graph illustrates participation in 3 different sports among those football was the most popular, whereas athletics and swimming show advancement in the last of the period.
Around 20 million pounds are spent in 2008 which kept on increasing reaching around 33 million pounds at the end of this period. It can be seen the parents spent more over this period.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 187, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this football' or 'those footballs'?
Suggestion: this football; those footballs
...rticipation in 3 different sports among those football was the most popular, whereas athletics...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...e parents spent more over this period. However in Britain over the same period, it can...
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Line 3, column 673, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...period. It can be seen the participation extremely increased at the end then at t...
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Line 4, column 186, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this football' or 'those footballs'?
Suggestion: this football; those footballs
...rticipation in 3 different sports among those football was the most popular, whereas athletics...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, then, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 5.60731707317 268% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 51.0 33.7804878049 151% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 3.97073170732 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1429.0 965.302439024 148% => OK
No of words: 283.0 196.424390244 144% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04946996466 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10153676581 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77665227385 2.65546596893 105% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.349823321555 0.547539520022 64% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 393.3 283.868780488 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 1.53170731707 261% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 4.33902439024 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 22.4926829268 102% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.7241404344 43.030603864 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.083333333 112.824112599 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5833333333 22.9334400587 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.25 5.23603664747 62% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240175779756 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129045395658 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878414787378 0.0843802449381 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172660494037 0.15604864568 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078242623029 0.0819641961636 95% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.2329268293 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 65.05 61.2550243902 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.62 8.06136585366 82% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.9970731707 102% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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