The given pie graph illustrates the rate of people of fitness center is Oslo, Norway in 2010 and 2015.
Overall, the proportion of membership taking part in a fitness center had changed between 2010 and 2015. On the other hand, the young people had growth up percentages in the charts.
Out of four groups, the rate of people over 65 year of age had the similar figure for 15% in 2010 and 2015. The proportion of people from 35-65 year of age was the noticeably highest, but it had its significantly reduce from 2010 to 2015, by 13% (from 43% to 30%).
The young people go to the fitness center went up in 02 groups. The membership under 22 year of age sharply rose by 8% (from 12% to 20%) in 05 years 2010 and 2015. The figure for people of 23-35 year of age witnessed a moderate rise from 30% to 35% within the period. If the membership in 35-64 year of age reached a peak of 43% in 2010, but the people of 23-35 years of age going to the fitness center was bottom at 35% in 2015.
The given pie graph illustrates the rate of people of fitness center is Oslo, Norway in 2010 and 2015.
Overall, the proportion of membership taking part in a fitness center had changed between 2010 and 2015. On the other hand, the young people had growth up percentages in the charts.
Out of four groups, the rate of people over 65 year of age had the similar figure for 15% in 2010 and 2015. The proportion of people from 35-65 year of age was the noticeably highest, but it had its significantly reduce from 2010 to 2015, by 13% (from 43% to 30%).
The young people go to the fitness center went up in 02 groups. The membership under 22 year of age sharply rose by 8% (from 12% to 20%) in 05 years 2010 and 2015. The figure for people of 23-35 year of age witnessed a moderate rise from 30% to 35% within the period. If the membership in 35-64 year of age reached a peak of 43% in 2010, but the people of 23-35 years of age going to the fitness center was bottom at 35% in 2015.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... was the noticeably highest, but it had its significantly reduce from 2010 to 2015,...
^^^
Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he fitness center went up in 02 groups. The membership under 22 year of age sharply...
^^^
Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...m 12% to 20% in 05 years 2010 and 2015. The figure for people of 23-35 year of age ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 794.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.17894736842 4.92477711251 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22005465232 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 213.3 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.1 1.45097560976 76% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1297605224 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2222222222 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.504775592553 0.215688989381 234% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.272947609941 0.103423049105 264% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190365382454 0.0843802449381 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.434878118398 0.15604864568 279% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218915552201 0.0819641961636 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 92.46 61.2550243902 151% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.96 11.4140731707 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.34 8.06136585366 79% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 195, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... was the noticeably highest, but it had its significantly reduce from 2010 to 2015,...
^^^
Line 4, column 65, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...he fitness center went up in 02 groups. The membership under 22 year of age sharply...
^^^
Line 4, column 163, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...m 12% to 20% in 05 years 2010 and 2015. The figure for people of 23-35 year of age ...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 794.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 190.0 196.424390244 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.17894736842 4.92477711251 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.71268753763 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.22005465232 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 90.0 106.607317073 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.473684210526 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 213.3 283.868780488 75% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.1 1.45097560976 76% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 8.0 4.33902439024 184% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1297605224 43.030603864 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.2222222222 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1111111111 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.88888888889 5.23603664747 55% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.504775592553 0.215688989381 234% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.272947609941 0.103423049105 264% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.190365382454 0.0843802449381 226% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.434878118398 0.15604864568 279% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.218915552201 0.0819641961636 267% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 13.2329268293 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 92.46 61.2550243902 151% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.3012195122 54% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 6.96 11.4140731707 61% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.34 8.06136585366 79% => OK
difficult_words: 20.0 40.7170731707 49% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.