the graph below shows consumers average expenditure on cell phone national and international fixed line and services in America between 2001 and 2010

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the graph below shows consumers average expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed - line and services in America between 2001 and 2010

Submitted by HoQuaan on Wed, 02/09/2022 - 10:30

The line chart below illustrates the amount of money spent on cell phone services, national fixed line services and international fixed line line services.

It is clear that while the yearly spending on mobile phone increased significantly , the opposite was true for national fixed line services. Also, the figure for international fixed line services was lowest during the period.

As can be seen from the chart, in 2001. There was 700$ spent on national fixed line services by the US residents, in comparison with only around 200$ each on mobile phone and international landline services. Over the next five years, the average money for national landline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By contrast, the figure for cell phone services witnessed a significant increase about 300$. At the same time. the amount of money spent for international landline services fluctuated slightly below 300$

Look a the chart in more detail, in 2006. US consumers spent the money for national landline services keep decrease with just only 500$. From the year 2006 onward, it can be seen that cell phone became the most common means of communication. To be specific, yearly spent on mobile phone increased to nearly 750$, while the figure for national fixed services decreased to about 400$. During the same period, the money spent for international fixed services keep stay unchanged

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'charts'.
Suggestion: charts
The line chart below illustrates the amount of money s...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: line
...d line services and international fixed line line services. It is clear that while th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... on mobile phone increased significantly , the opposite was true for national fixe...
^^
Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$700'.
Suggestion: $700
...seen from the chart, in 2001. There was 700$ spent on national fixed line services b...
^^^^
Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...sidents, in comparison with only around 200$ each on mobile phone and international ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...age money for national landline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By...
^^
Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('fall') instead of another adjective.
...ney for national landline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By contrast, the figur...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey for national landline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By contra...
^^
Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...dline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By contrast, the figure for ce...
^^^^
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$300'.
Suggestion: $300
... witnessed a significant increase about 300$. At the same time. the amount of money ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... increase about 300$. At the same time. the amount of money spent for international...
^^^
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$300'.
Suggestion: $300
...line services fluctuated slightly below 300$ Look a the chart in more detail, in ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
... fluctuated slightly below 300$ Look a the chart in more detail, in 2006. US consu...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$500'.
Suggestion: $500
...e services keep decrease with just only 500$. From the year 2006 onward, it can be s...
^^^^
Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$750'.
Suggestion: $750
...ent on mobile phone increased to nearly 750$, while the figure for national fixed se...
^^^^
Line 7, column 378, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$400'.
Suggestion: $400
...ional fixed services decreased to about 400$. During the same period, the money spen...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1167.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16371681416 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6351051651 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464601769912 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 358.2 283.868780488 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9493918822 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7692307692 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3846153846 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.92307692308 5.23603664747 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323134408241 0.215688989381 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129198732833 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815696163301 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245355573772 0.15604864568 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693295660339 0.0819641961636 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 10, Rule ID: MASS_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error - use third-person verb forms for singular and mass nouns: 'charts'.
Suggestion: charts
The line chart below illustrates the amount of money s...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 137, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: line
...d line services and international fixed line line services. It is clear that while th...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 83, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... on mobile phone increased significantly , the opposite was true for national fixe...
^^
Line 5, column 51, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$700'.
Suggestion: $700
...seen from the chart, in 2001. There was 700$ spent on national fixed line services b...
^^^^
Line 5, column 146, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...sidents, in comparison with only around 200$ each on mobile phone and international ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 283, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...age money for national landline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By...
^^
Line 5, column 289, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('fall') instead of another adjective.
...ney for national landline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By contrast, the figur...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 290, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ey for national landline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By contra...
^^
Line 5, column 309, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$200'.
Suggestion: $200
...dline services had a slightly fall to 200$ in 2006. By contrast, the figure for ce...
^^^^
Line 5, column 410, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$300'.
Suggestion: $300
... witnessed a significant increase about 300$. At the same time. the amount of money ...
^^^^
Line 5, column 434, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... increase about 300$. At the same time. the amount of money spent for international...
^^^
Line 5, column 522, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$300'.
Suggestion: $300
...line services fluctuated slightly below 300$ Look a the chart in more detail, in ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 6, Rule ID: DT_DT[1]
Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'a' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: a; the
... fluctuated slightly below 300$ Look a the chart in more detail, in 2006. US consu...
^^^^^
Line 7, column 132, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$500'.
Suggestion: $500
...e services keep decrease with just only 500$. From the year 2006 onward, it can be s...
^^^^
Line 7, column 308, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$750'.
Suggestion: $750
...ent on mobile phone increased to nearly 750$, while the figure for national fixed se...
^^^^
Line 7, column 378, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$400'.
Suggestion: $400
...ional fixed services decreased to about 400$. During the same period, the money spen...
^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, look, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1167.0 965.302439024 121% => OK
No of words: 226.0 196.424390244 115% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16371681416 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.87727950738 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6351051651 2.65546596893 99% => OK
Unique words: 105.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.464601769912 0.547539520022 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 358.2 283.868780488 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.33902439024 161% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 3.36585365854 267% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.9493918822 43.030603864 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.7692307692 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.3846153846 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.92307692308 5.23603664747 37% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 16.0 1.69756097561 943% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.09268292683 220% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.323134408241 0.215688989381 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.129198732833 0.103423049105 125% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0815696163301 0.0843802449381 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.245355573772 0.15604864568 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0693295660339 0.0819641961636 85% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 13.2329268293 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 61.2550243902 89% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 11.4140731707 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.13 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.4329268293 74% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.