The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000 Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below

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The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.

The picture gives information about the proportion of using cigarette of 1000 individuals in Someland including male and female in a pariod of 40 years, which started in 1960.

It is clear that at the beginning of the period, there were a huge gap in the figure of smoking between men and women. While men's data had downward trend, the rate of women smoking fluctuated.

Looking at the graph in detail, in 1960, the number of women who smoked was under 100 per 1000 individuals. After five years, this data stayed unchanged, then reached a peak at about 300 women in 1975. However, after reaching the highest point, this figure slightly decreased annually. At the end of the period, there were about 200 women were smokers.

Regarding to the number of Someland's male smoker, it was significantly higher than this rate of female in 1960, at about 600 men per 1000 people. Nevertheless, there was a positive change with this data. It continually fell during the period. Rate of male smokers decreased by nearly 350 people after 40 years, hitted the lowest point at about 250 users. At the end of the period, the data of smoking of men and women was nearly similar, the quantity difference was about 50 indivisuals.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'trended'.
Suggestion: trended
...and women. While mens data had downward trend, the rate of women smoking fluctuated. ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1011.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79146919431 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51360039048 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54028436019 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7311395122 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.25 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.23603664747 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125642600989 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493088241697 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587300536807 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828134453328 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147619307256 0.0819641961636 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'trended'.
Suggestion: trended
...and women. While mens data had downward trend, the rate of women smoking fluctuated. ...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, nevertheless, regarding, so, then, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 33.7804878049 133% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1011.0 965.302439024 105% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79146919431 4.92477711251 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51360039048 2.65546596893 95% => OK
Unique words: 114.0 106.607317073 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54028436019 0.547539520022 99% => OK
syllable_count: 300.6 283.868780488 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 3.36585365854 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 8.94146341463 134% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.7311395122 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.25 112.824112599 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.5833333333 22.9334400587 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.91666666667 5.23603664747 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.125642600989 0.215688989381 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0493088241697 0.103423049105 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0587300536807 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0828134453328 0.15604864568 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0147619307256 0.0819641961636 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 13.2329268293 75% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 71.14 61.2550243902 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.21 11.4140731707 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.