the graph gives information about male and female gym membership between 1980 and 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the number of people who join a gym club in two male and female group from 1980 to 2010.
It is obvious that there was a downward trend in men membership troughout the prieod and an upward trend in the number of women membership in the same time between 1980 and 2010. By 2005 men group reached the pick and in 2010 get lowest point.
As can be seen, after that the number of women increased about 1000 in 1985 in 1990 has a unsignificant drop and then raised around 900 person and by a suddenly fall in 2000 decrese nearly 2200. In 2005 reverse previous location and after than by more than 700 person decreased in 2010. The men group after a significant went up around 2000 person in 1985, and during 1990 to 2000 decreased and recovered again then rasied sharply get to pick at 5000 in 2005 which by a dramatically fallen under 900 person in 2010.
As a result, the number of men who joint in gym club changed a lot during this time.
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Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a gym club in two male and female group from 1980 to 2010. It is obvious that ...
^^
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the lowest'.
Suggestion: get the lowest
... men group reached the pick and in 2010 get lowest point. As can be seen, after that the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ncreased about 1000 in 1985 in 1990 has a unsignificant drop and then raised aro...
^
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...1000 in 1985 in 1990 has a unsignificant drop and then raised around 900 person a...
^^
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ficant drop and then raised around 900 person and by a suddenly fall in 2000 decrese ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('suddenly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('fall') instead of another adjective.
...nd then raised around 900 person and by a suddenly fall in 2000 decrese nearly 2200. In 2005 re...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ocation and after than by more than 700 person decreased in 2010. The men group after ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...hich by a dramatically fallen under 900 person in 2010. As a result, the number of m...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32417582418 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24184577506 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5780484064 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127275866631 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642939754834 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608976160551 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924017562652 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656984724387 0.0819641961636 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.93 61.2550243902 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 11.4140731707 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a gym club in two male and female group from 1980 to 2010. It is obvious that ...
^^
Line 2, column 227, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'get the lowest'.
Suggestion: get the lowest
... men group reached the pick and in 2010 get lowest point. As can be seen, after that the...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 89, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ncreased about 1000 in 1985 in 1990 has a unsignificant drop and then raised aro...
^
Line 3, column 104, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...1000 in 1985 in 1990 has a unsignificant drop and then raised around 900 person a...
^^
Line 3, column 138, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ficant drop and then raised around 900 person and by a suddenly fall in 2000 decrese ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 152, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('suddenly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('fall') instead of another adjective.
...nd then raised around 900 person and by a suddenly fall in 2000 decrese nearly 2200. In 2005 re...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 263, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...ocation and after than by more than 700 person decreased in 2010. The men group after ...
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 502, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'person' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'people', 'persons'.
Suggestion: people; persons
...hich by a dramatically fallen under 900 person in 2010. As a result, the number of m...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, then, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 787.0 965.302439024 82% => OK
No of words: 182.0 196.424390244 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.32417582418 4.92477711251 88% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.67297393991 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.24184577506 2.65546596893 84% => OK
Unique words: 100.0 106.607317073 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.549450549451 0.547539520022 100% => OK
syllable_count: 215.1 283.868780488 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.2 1.45097560976 83% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.07073170732 280% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.5780484064 43.030603864 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.428571429 112.824112599 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.57142857143 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 1.69756097561 471% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127275866631 0.215688989381 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0642939754834 0.103423049105 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0608976160551 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0924017562652 0.15604864568 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0656984724387 0.0819641961636 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.2329268293 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.93 61.2550243902 129% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.07 11.4140731707 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.