IELTS 10 Test 3 Writing task 1 The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison

The two bar charts dive into the lives of graduate and postgraduate students of UK and give information about their activities after their graduation in the year 2008.
Overall, both graduate and post graduate students show a similar trend. A significant number of students get admitted into further study, while only a few students go into voluntary work.
In 2008, almost twenty-nine thousand graduate students got admitted to further study making this sector the most popular choice for graduates. The second most popular choice is part time work as 17 thousand graduating students opted for part time work. Unemployment came to a close third as 16 thousand students remained unemployed after their graduation. Lastly, only 3 thousand students got into voluntary work making it the least popular sector for students.
Post graduate students also showed a similar characteristic as graduate students since the highest number of post graduate students chose to get into further study. Part-time work is also a preferred category for the post graduate students as 2535 students went into part time work, which is very close to the number of students who went into further study. 1625 students still remained unemployed, while voluntary work is the least preferred choice among post graduate students as well with only 325 students going into voluntary works.

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 178, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...tes. The second most popular choice is part time work as 17 thousand graduating students...
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Line 3, column 238, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... thousand graduating students opted for part time work. Unemployment came to a close thir...
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Line 4, column 267, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...ate students as 2535 students went into part time work, which is very close to the number...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, lastly, second, so, still, third, well, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 33.7804878049 74% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1148.0 965.302439024 119% => OK
No of words: 216.0 196.424390244 110% => OK
Chars per words: 5.31481481481 4.92477711251 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 3.73543355544 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60637869016 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481481481481 0.547539520022 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 340.2 283.868780488 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.760296609 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.8 112.824112599 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6 22.9334400587 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.23603664747 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256058588024 0.215688989381 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127929393024 0.103423049105 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436871343726 0.0843802449381 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183983865032 0.15604864568 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026299787521 0.0819641961636 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.2329268293 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 61.2550243902 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.3012195122 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.52 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.02 8.06136585366 87% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.0658536585 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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