The illustration shows a bicycle which is an environmentally friendly vehicle Describe this vehicle and its environmentally friendly feature

Essay topics:

The illustration shows a bicycle, which is an environmentally friendly vehicle. Describe this vehicle and its environmentally friendly feature.

The diagram depicts the structure of a bicycle which is designed-created for more convenient transportation.

The bicycle is divide into two parts, including the first part use to convert human force into motion and the second part is the frame connect to the first part.

The first part of the bicycle includes many sections such as a pedal, two wheels, and special a chain. Both two wheels have a rim surrounded by a tire to make the motion more smooth and the spokes are the important section which uses to hold and create the structure of the wheels. Furthermore, the first part also has a brain of the bicycle which is a device to convert the power of humans into spin motion. This device includes crank, chain, rear derailleur, pedal, and the front derailleur. Those sections have their own effect on the motion of the bicycle and all effect be connected into one device. The chain is the main section of this device which connects a big crank and two small cranks and the rear derailleur have an effect to keep two small cranks balance motion. The pedal is a section which is created to convert and be the pedestal of the cyclists; feet.

The second part which have a effect to connect all of the sections of the bicycle. The pump and the saddle make distance between people and wheels and be a seat for people. Furthermore, crossbar, front brake, rear brake all create the bicycle frame. The last section of this frame is the handlebars which help people to hold and navigation move for people.

In conclusion, all of the bicycle’s sections are friendly to the environment and the power to motion is the power of humans. In additions, a bicycle is the mean of transport which have more benefit to the environment than other popular means of transports.

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Average: 5.6 (2 votes)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 64, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
...nto two parts, including the first part use to convert human force into motion and ...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...the frame connect to the first part. The first part of the bicycle includes many...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...e the pedestal of the cyclists; feet. The second part which have a effect to conn...
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Line 7, column 28, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...sts; feet. The second part which have a effect to connect all of the sections o...
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Line 7, column 48, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ond part which have a effect to connect all of the sections of the bicycle. The pump and t...
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Line 7, column 84, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...ect all of the sections of the bicycle. The pump and the saddle make distance betwe...
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Line 9, column 16, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...tion move for people. In conclusion, all of the bicycle's sections are friendly to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, second, so, in addition, in conclusion, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 7.0 214% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 6.8 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 8.0 3.15609756098 253% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 33.7804878049 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 3.97073170732 252% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1466.0 965.302439024 152% => OK
No of words: 311.0 196.424390244 158% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71382636656 4.92477711251 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 3.73543355544 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57693321116 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 132.0 106.607317073 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.424437299035 0.547539520022 78% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 437.4 283.868780488 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 8.94146341463 168% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5486220865 43.030603864 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.7333333333 112.824112599 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 22.9334400587 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86666666667 5.23603664747 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 3.83414634146 130% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.09268292683 195% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.078204520018 0.215688989381 36% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0324684929052 0.103423049105 31% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0280448118864 0.0843802449381 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0446388700034 0.15604864568 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0247118774063 0.0819641961636 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.2329268293 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 61.2550243902 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.12 8.06136585366 88% => OK
difficult_words: 49.0 40.7170731707 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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